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  • Task 2 (Is it a positive or negative development): Retirement

    Posted by Falak on January 6, 2022 at 9:34 AM

    Nowadays some older people choose to live in retirement communities with other people, rather than living with their adult children.

    Is it a positive or negative development?

    Write minimum 250 words

    Falak replied 4 weeks, 1 day ago 4 Members · 6 Replies
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  • Sakshi

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    January 6, 2022 at 7:18 PM
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    With the modern cultural development in the society more and more elderly people started moving to retirement centers, instead of living with their grown up children. This helps parents to enjoy their retirement phase and give a fair chance to children to stand out on their own feet.

    Admittedly, due to this decision of elderly people give them a chance to open up more and more and live freely without being dependent on their adult pupils. In addition to that, they could easily connect and engage with other people of the same age group, not only this but they are able to share their emotions with others. Regular entertainment and physical activities in these homes gives them an opportunity to be active and outspoken which in turn keeps them healthy and fit.

    In addition to all the above mentioned advantages, better health care facilities available at these retirement communities makes them the most sought-after place especially for the people above 60. On the other hand, the only negative aspect of this migration is that grandchildren get deprived from their grandparents’ love but this can be taken care of if they both visit each other on a regular basis.

    In conclusion, I believe this is a positive development as now children get space to prove themselves and stand out strong in life whereas parents get time to relax and maintain a healthy lifestyle while enjoying their retirement phase of life.

    • Falak

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      January 10, 2022 at 10:32 PM
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      adult pupils. ( younger ones)

      Body paragraphs are not talking about it is advantageous for children , but is mentioned in both introduction and conclusion- try to maintain the coherence.

      Band: 3.5/6

      Keep writing!!

  • Omer

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    January 7, 2022 at 10:02 AM
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    It is becoming more common in the older generation to choose to live in retirement communities with the same age group people than living with their adult children. This in a way helping them to be more independent than being with their kids. I strongly believe that this is a positive change in our societies.

    While it is important to be a part of a joint family and raise kids and grand kids together, it is equally demanding for a person to maintain his Individuality. It is the freedom of thoughts and speech that gives a person ultimate satisfaction than anything else. Parents after raising their kids for almost part of their lives are no different to it. In order to explore life and mingle with the right age group people, the retirement homes are the best place. They can share their ideas, try out new things in life and follow their unfulfilled dreams.

    Now a days, adapting in a macro family is getting more difficult when it comes to cost of living especially in the metro cities. Smaller homes are easy to locate and this has raised to the micro families which in-turn lead to the booming urban culture. It is technically getting difficult for parents to stay with their grown-up children. To give an example of my own family, we are three siblings and all are living separately.

    To conclude, it is less surprising to see many elderly people moving away from their children and choosing to stay in the retirement homes. This gives them a free will to lead their lives and follow their dreams.

    • Falak

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      January 10, 2022 at 10:37 PM
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      Second paragraph could have more loud and clear topic sentence and the statement you opened with can be an explanation, will make it more cohesive.

      Keep writing!!

      band: 4/6

  • Kapil

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    June 1, 2022 at 11:37 PM
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    In this modern era, the lifestyle of people has been changed frequently which impacts negatively and positively on each generation. It is a new trend that older persons prefer to stay in the retirement home instead of with their adult children, and it has merits and demerits to live far from the family which will discuss in forthcoming paragraphs with examples and sum up with a logical conclusion.

    First of all, a person has spent their whole life for their family to fulfill their requirements, and they don’t get a chance to enjoy their life, so it is the best time to enjoy themselves without taking any tension in the world. Firstly, due to a hectic life schedule, people don’t find time to get relaxed, so while they are getting retired, they have also the authority to live a life in their own way, and when they meet the same age group, they could share the ideas and make fun together. Secondly, nowadays many parents live alone because their children live abroad, so they feel lonely at home, thereby they feel depressed at some stage, so it is better to live in communities to avoid such problems. In 2020, a study conducted by oxford university revealed that 60% of the older generation suffer from depression due to living alone at home.

    On the other hand, there are also negative impacts, if they are not living with their children. Firstly, at a certain age, they face a plethora of diseases such as asthma, diabetes, and blood pressure for that they have to make a regular checkup at the hospital, so in this situation, the only closer one can help to take care of their health. For example, as per the report by the bbc news, 20% of older die every year who are not living with family due to being unable to get aid on time. Secondly, older age people always have a dream to play with their grandson, so if they are not living with their children, they also missed this opportunity.

    To conclude, living a life with full enjoyment is necessary for human beings which they can experience after retirement with the same age group of communities, but if they don’t live with their adult children then they have to suffer during their health problems and could not realize the value of grandparents.

    • Falak

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      June 7, 2022 at 12:47 PM
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      home instead of (living) with their adult children

      which will (be) discuss (discussed) in forthcoming paragraphs

      a person has spent their (his) whole life for their family

      a study conducted by oxford (Oxford)

      bbc (BBC) news

      with their grandson,(grandchildren)

      Is it a positive or negative development ? ( The opinion is not loud and clear)

      Keep writing!!

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