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  • Task -2 Some people think that having a set retirement age ( Agree/ Disagree )

     Vimi updated 5 days, 2 hours ago 3 Members · 4 Posts
  • Vimi

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    August 12, 2021 at 9:49 AM
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    Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age.

    Do you agree or disagree?

    Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement?

    Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

    Write at least 250 words.

  • Sonali

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    November 23, 2021 at 11:08 AM
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    People suggest that there should be a flexible age of retirement for employees considering their occupation type.I strongly agree with this view because different occupations demand different effort and therefore, workers in such jobs should be treated differently.

    Fairness should be granted by taking into account difficulty level in a job.Some jobs require a lot of physical and mental effort without much period for recreation or relaxation which can cause recurring mental fatigue in some people over a period of time. There fore, it is important that employees in such type of jobs have a freedom to enjoy retirement at an early age.For example, as per my observation, I think some jobs are demanding ,so people ignore exercise and healthy habits during their young age while spending a lot of time at their workplaces but these practices can prove to be fatal if continued till late adulthood. Therefore, such people should have benefit of early retirement with less work related responsibilities.

    Construction workers and workers with disability should be exempted from working after 60 years of age and should be allowed to enjoy the benefit of pension at an early age.This is because construction workers need great deal of physical strength to carry out tasks like manual labour which is stressful and hazardous after late middle age as people usually start losing physical strength at this age.
    Similarly, for people with disability, government should provide age relaxation for retirement so that they can enjoy their late adulthood with less work related responsibilities.

    In conclusion, depending on the circumstances and type of occupation there should be a flexible age for retirement so that workers like construction workers and people with disability can enjoy pension benefits at an early age.

    • Vimi

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      December 1, 2021 at 8:30 AM
      160 Network Points
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      People suggest that there should be a flexible age of retirement for employees considering their occupation type. I strongly agree with this view because different occupations demand different effort and therefore, workers in such jobs should be treated differently.

      Fairness should be granted by taking into account (the) difficulty level in a job. Some jobs require a lot of physical and mental effort without much period (time) for recreation or relaxation which can cause recurring mental fatigue in some people over a period of time. There fore (Therefore), it is important that employees in such type of jobs have a freedom to enjoy retirement at an early age. For example, as per my observation, I think some jobs are demanding ,so people ignore exercise and healthy habits during their young age while spending a lot of time at their workplaces but these practices can prove to be fatal if continued till late adulthood. Therefore, such people should have benefit of early retirement with less work related responsibilities.

      Construction workers and workers with disability should be exempted from working after 60 years of age and should be allowed to enjoy the benefit of pension at an early age. This is because construction workers need great deal of physical strength to carry out tasks like manual labour which is stressful and hazardous after late middle age as people usually start losing physical strength at this age.
      Similarly, for people with disability, government should provide age relaxation for retirement so that they can enjoy their late adulthood with less work related responsibilities.

      In conclusion, depending on the circumstances and type of occupation there should be a flexible age for retirement so that workers like construction workers and people with disability can enjoy pension benefits at an early age.

      Feedback:

      Well written! Length is appropriate and ideas are connected to topic, but could be better supported with more details. The opinion is clear. There are few linking words / transition words used. Vocabulary repetition – such as “retirement”. There should be more paraphrasing. More advanced vocabulary could have been used in some places. Paragraphing has been skilfully managed. A few Grammar errors are seen but they are minimal in number and hence insignificant.

      Band Score : 4.5/6

  • ahmet

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    November 27, 2021 at 8:29 PM
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    It is argued by some people that setting a standard retirement age for everyone without considering their working conditions is not a righteous decision and they should retire particularly depending on their own occupation instead of a general approach. It is agreed with this opinion since different working environments have a different effect on humans. Therefore, people who experience extreme conditions while working must be treated individually in terms of retirement age.

    It is undeniably true that all occupations have their own pros and cons however, some of them can be more stressful and demanding than others. As a matter of fact, workers are exposed to different conditions depending on their workloads, colleagues, and places where they work. Consequently, this will lead to a variety in their working ability to a certain age. For this reason, authorities should classify all the working groups on a risk scale spanning from the most hazardous one to the least considering all the detrimental factors to the workers’ health. Based on this classification, it will be possible to determine the optimum age to retire for an individual.

    Even though it is considered by some people that blue-collars and white-collars are equally suffering while working, it would be unfair to say that, when considering the fact that blue-collars become both mentally and physically fatigued after long and exhausting years of work, unlike white collars who experience only mental exhaustion. To illustrate, a computer engineer working in his office is less likely to have an industrial accident and occupational disease than an operator in the metal production industry.

    To conclude, all employees should not be treated when it comes to determining a retirement age hence, they work in different environments. The workers who have occupations requiring physical and mental power ought to retire sooner than the ones having relatively lighter workloads.

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