[jose joy]

We can see a trend were in, people are consuming their food from various parts of the world rather than traditional cuisine. There are many contributing facts for this increasing trend, the most important one being globalization. I see this as a good development as variety is always good.

This trend is exuberated due to globalization and global networks. As seen a lot of Dine-ins is being opened which serves international food. Due to globalization, a lot of global brands are opening their eateries everywhere. It has turned to a lifestyle statement due to influences from media advertisement, social media, and foreign travelers. There are a lot of international food programs from channels like Travel and living, with shows like MasterChef, which showcases talents, that inspires a chef in us, A lot of raw materials, that was previously unknown to us is now available that fuel the ignited flame. Global networks enable trading and advertising a walk in the park, these make raw materials accessible. Big examples of this include fast-food chains like McDonald’s, KFC, and Subway opening in every nook and corner.

This trend can be considered as a good development since variety is considered beneficial for health. There is historical evidence supporting this, British monarchs had always lived longer than commoners, many might argue this is due to better health care, but it is seen that they seldom get sick, historians argue this is mainly due to the variety of foods sourced from various colonies around the world. Now due to disappearing borders, you need not be a monarch to have a better quality of food and cuisines.

In conclusion, globalization has allowed us to enjoy more varied food from around the globe, benefiting our health, and I think this trend is only getting more and more prominent as national boundaries are blurring with each passing time.

[Falak]

a lot of Dine-ins is (are) being opened

There are a lot of international food programs from (T.V) channels

which showcases (showcase) talents, – as the subject is programs (plural)

Global networks enable trading and advertising a walk in the park, these ( making) make raw materials accessible.

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many might argue this is due to better health care, but (I found “but” is inappropriate here) it is seen that they seldom get sick,

Feedback : Well- written essay with examples and explanations. Be careful with the points mentioned above.

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Band: 4.5/6

[Shanthala]

It is observed that these days, there has been an increasing trend that many people are prefering to consume cuisines from different parts of the world than locally prepared food.This is because of globalisation.In my opine,this is a positive trend to support international trade and also to satisfy people’s taste buds.

Due to globalisation,students who studied abroad have exposure to foreign culture and its famous cuisines.So, they crave to have those cuisines often in their home country.To meet this demand,many eateries of international origin have flourished near colleges and IT companies.These eateries are offering students and IT employees plethora of international cuisines to satisfy their taste buds and also to experience a feel good factor of trying food which is not locally originited.For an instance,in a recent study published in a local news paper suggested that these days more youngsters prefer to eat noodles than dosa for supper.

It is certainly a good development for international trade to increase their consumer base across the globe.This also gives exposure to local markets to franchise international food to local people.Besides,this trend also brings positive impact on home country’s economy by hosting international food festival which can cater to people’s need.With this exposure, of different international foods in their home counrtry,youngsters can easily adapt international cusinine when they travel abroad for higher education without any hassle.

To conclude,this increasing trend gives exposure to local people to experience different cultures and also satisfy their taste buds.Truly,globalisation has created positive impact on international trade.Because,it gives an opportunity to people to satisy their needs to consume international cusine.

[Falak]

parts of the world than locally prepared food. (owing to globalisation) This is because of globalisation

locally originited (originated)

I could read lots of “this” and “that” throughout; sentence structure should be improved

Example in B.P 2 is missing

Band: 4/6

[Sakshi]

Nowadays, it is observed that people prefer consuming food from different parts of the world rather than locally available cuisines. All thanks to these advanced technologies which are evolving around the globe, adding an advantage for people as now they can explore a new variety of cuisines.

Due to this emerging use of technology, be it cell phones or television, people watch a lot of advertisements these days and get mesmerized by them. In order to try those things, they started preparing international cuisines at their home following instructions from the social media platforms like YouTube and Instagram. Following this trend, restaurants also started serving a variety of international foods. Also, this modern technology has made it so much easier for people to travel from one place to another. As a result, these days people have started migrating from their hometown to different parts of the world. This has become so common that it is a need of the society to have a plethora of food options available for the immigrants. Online food delivery apps like Swiggy, Zomato and Uber eats have also played a Significant role in this increasing trend.

It is certain that this kind of benefit opens our minds to other cultures and establishes good communications among people. For instance, when someone from India eats food from the United States, they may develop an interest in the culture and then would easily be able to establish a relation with them which might also help in businesses from overseas. On top of that, these cross-cultural food changes might help people to build a good balanced diet.

In conclusion, technology has given a good opportunity to people in order to work together. While this helps us to enjoy various foods from around the corner of the world, at the same time it gives us a chance to learn about different cultures and maintain a good balanced diet.

[Falak]

Topic sentence needs to be more loud and clear

, restaurants also (have) started serving a variety of international foods.

Well-written essay , make use of cohesive devices in order to add more cohesion.

Band: 4.5/6

[jagriti]

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[Falak]

Feedback : Usage of relative pronouns is not accurate (sometime unnecessarily used). More cohesion is expected in examples.

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Band: 3.5/6

[Hemangi]

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[Sudhakar]

These days, people are inclined towards the different cuisines from several countries, foreign food chains and this trend is increasing among people. The advancements in the globalization and transportation made import and export of various food items smoothly. Although this shift has few negative impacts but it carries great benefits.

The globalization and technology have simplified the way how different countries can communicate and transport various food items. Globalization made the world as a small village therefore trade among countries increased greatly. Due to the advancement in technology, various freezing techniques have been invented to keep the food safe for many days without spoilage. A good illustration of this is India is exporting the spices to European countries via different seaways every year resulting in enjoying the Indian cuisines by them.

To begin with, there are few negative impacts of importing foods from other countries such as expensive importing costs. Due to the fact that food has to travel from long distance, various freezing techniques need to be used. Hence government has to bear all these charges; however, it has many great benefits. Firstly, it allows the people to explore different cuisines from various countries which provides an opportunity to explore their culture. Secondly, people can experience variety of fruits or foodstuff which are not only grown in their own country but also from other countries. For instance, India is importing Arabian dates every year which are only grown in middle east so that Indians can relish the other country dates.

To summarise, Due to the progression in globalization and transportation, nowadays it is possible to experience the different cuisines from all over the world; even though it is expensive, it provides great benefits of enjoying the food from abundant regions as well as understanding their culture.

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[Falak]

foreign food chains and this trend is increasing among people (incomplete sentence)

various food items smoothly (smooth)

trade among countries (has) increased greatly.

To begin with, (not suitable as per the context, though in B.P 1, it could work)

Secondly, people (now) can experience variety

sentence structure ” due to” has been used repeatedly. Hence, essay has monotonous structure

Introduction and conclusion are well -written , there is clear overall progression. Task achievement is there. Work on structure. Be careful in opting the “cohesive devices” ; otherwise it would come under faulty and mechanical usage

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Band: 3.5/6

[Nihar]

Nowadays lot of people like to travel and they like to share the experience with other. One such experience they want to share is of cuisine, the kind of food the eat what are the ingredients used and how it taste like, there has been a increase in trend that many people are prefer to consume cuisine from different parts of the world than locally prepared food. In my opinion, this is a positive trend to support international trade and to satisfy people’s taste buds.

Due to globalization and ever increasing use of social media platform many individual are directly or indirectly promoting different types of cuisine and it is promoting different types of culture because food and culture are inter-related. For example if a student travels to other country for studies then by eating the countries cuisine will help him to understand countries culture which will help him adjust in the environment without much efforts.

It is certainly a good development for international trade as it increase there base across the globe. For example X is the food chain of country A and it opens a franchise in country B, so people will be able to explore the cuisine of country A and also they can add some local dishes and add some other cuisine and create a new dish.

To conclude globalization has a positive impact on food and beverage industry as well as it is allowing people to try different types of cuisine and learn some new things about other cultures.