WRITING TASK 2 agree or disagree (too many choices)Posted by Anureet on August 4, 2021 at 3:23 PM
Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.
Q. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
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jaidheeshMemberAugust 4, 2021 at 8:01 PM
Some people think that we have numerous options out there for anything we desire. I agree with this statement and this essay will elaborate on the choices that we can opt for in our day-to-day lives.
With the advance of technology in the past decade and the advent of the digital age, a plethora of options is present when it comes to watching digital content. People have unlimited choices of movies, on-demand video, and music through streaming services like Netflix, Hotstar, HBO, etc. The wide choices make people ponder over what to watch during their spare time. Another segment that has changed due to the internet is the ease of shopping. Online shopping can be done in the comfort of our homes and again we could purchase anything from anywhere in the world. An example of this is Amazon, an online shopping website that streamlines this process of shopping. However, we are often in a state of dilemma about the various options out there to buy, be it gadgets to simple tools or large household products like refrigerators or Air conditioners.
On a separate note, most people are spoiled with choices of the restaurants and dishes they can try or what they savor. Mobile applications from Zomato and Swiggy facilitate this service by providing food delivery. Wide choices of cuisine like Chinese, Arabic or even European can be tried out from the selection of restaurants nearby one’s homes. The same goes for the dress and daily wear clothes that a person can choose from. Be it the latest trends in fashion or dressing styles of a bygone era, the choices are countless.
To conclude, there are various options available to be selected by the people. It is up to the individual to make the right decision that fits his needs when he decides to make a purchase.
AnureetMemberAugust 5, 2021 at 12:03 PM
BP 1: advance- advancement
options is- options are
choices of- choices in terms of
this process- the process
BP2: or what they savor- unnecessary
from- like Zomato
choices of – options in various cuisines
dress and daily wear- different types of clothes
Conclusion- to be- which can be
BAND SCORE: 4/6 Keep Writing!
JasmeetMemberAugust 4, 2021 at 10:50 PM
In the past, people were not given plenty of choices to decide from but these days we are blessed with many of them. I completely agree with the statement that we have so many options to choose the best for us.
To begin with, starting from our food, clothes, TV channels and different products we use in our daily life, we have immense range of options to choose from. In the past they were restricted to just few of them. The advent of technology and globalization has made it possible for everyone to decide from infinite options whereas in the past, people were confined only to local products or products nearby whereas now they are just a click away, for instance, an Indian can directly order the product he likes from USA using their website and paying money through online portal.
On the other hand, having too many choices to select from put a person in dilemma and they are often spoiled with them. It has increased the cost of living as each one in the family has different preferences and they go for theirs. They sometimes end up choosing the wrong option as there are so many choices in the education field too. More the number of choices, more would be the confusion to select the best one.
To conclude, as most of the people lack necessities one should wisely choose the product from the different choices keeping in mind various factors like time, money and usage. We must focus on prioritizing our real needs and make a right choice from the diverse option available.
ShwetaMemberAugust 5, 2021 at 1:03 AM
These days, some people are in a belief that we are surrounded by plenty of choices for each and everything. If we pick any aspect of our life, we so have more than one option to choose from, whether it be food, entertainment, travel, heath care, and so on. This essay will shed light on this topic followed by my point of view.
We live in a materialistic world. We have atleast more than one option for everything. For instance, for the birth of a child, these days hospitals have come up with several packages that includes various services, beginning from the delivery of a child to the post-birth photoshoot of the baby. Afterwards, in which prestigious and reputed play school, a child should should be admitted.
However, some people do believe that providing too many choices is not beneficial for the society. Since, this has somehow divided the society, where people with money can choose from various options, whereas poor people have to suffer as they are not left with any option. Such as, heath care systems is also divided and it has become partial for rich and poor. Where rich people are provided with options of personal suites in a hospital for their treatment and those with who do not have much money are not treated well.
To sum up, I believe there should be choices available, but for only those things that does not bring any sort of harm to the society. We should have option to select between good and bad only. Apart from this, too many choices only bring chaos.
shresthaMemberAugust 5, 2021 at 3:17 PM
AnureetMemberAugust 6, 2021 at 11:20 AM
Introduction- detail- detailed
Write a clear thesis statement incorporating the main points
BP1: our daily- their daily
available in- where clothes are available in
a lot- a lot of time
in 19th- in the 19th
were very confined with the choices-had restricted choices
they get- they got
don’t write personal examples
but and whereas can’t be used together in a single sentence
due to the lack- due to lack
from online- from online websites
Correlative Comparative- The more we explore, the higher the chances are to accomplish our needs
BP2: plethora- a plethora
Although- erroneous complex sentence
make a right- make the right
end up- end up in
a wrong- the wrong
Like for example- Don’t write like in formal letters- For instance
Example is not clear. Rewrite it
Conclusion- keeping- keep
have a firm decision- be firm in his decision
their requirement- his requirement
Band Score: 4/6 Keep Writing!
AnureetMemberAugust 6, 2021 at 2:30 PM
I apologize lose is correct
SarabjeetMemberAugust 5, 2021 at 4:18 PM
AnureetMemberAugust 6, 2021 at 11:46 AM
humans life as well as in educational field- write main points in your thesis statement
BP1: learn and discover- learnt and discovered
moderated- had an impact on
not any- no
by the development in- with the development of
at any- any
BP 2: for cuisine- in terms of food
provides the- can provide him
What I want to say is- don’t write such statements in formal essay writing
in past time- in the past
BP2: we- don’t write I or we in BPs
Conclusion- traveling- travelling
which help them- which can help
with any hustle and tassel- incorrect- without any difficulty
AnureetMemberAugust 6, 2021 at 11:48 AM
Band score- 3/6 Keep Writing!
shresthaMemberAugust 5, 2021 at 5:35 PM
HarithaMemberAugust 5, 2021 at 9:01 PM
These days people are fortunate enough to have endowed resources for their survival in the best possible way.
However, there are sections of society that even struggling to afford their daily basic needs. I partially agree with the statement.
This essay will discuss the possible points of view towards choices in society and justify them with viable examples.
To commence with, In the present era, Human beings have exponentially increased the number of options available in different fields such as food, clothes, electronic gadgets, living comforts due to many reasons.
Firstly, the creativity in mankind is increasing gradually towards self-comfort. In addition, The Human population is also enhancing day by day, and to generate enough needs for the people, Innovation is the only source.
For example, Sometimes lack of rains humans face many problems. Just to revoke the issue, artificial rains were created in some places. Likewise, everything is generated for some adequate reason.
Furthermore, the advancement in education and development has endowed people with the availability of an enormous number of professional fields to succeed in their lives.
on other hand, There are few sections of people still striving for their basic needs. Throughout the globe, some have many choices. However, all this hangs on with their economical status.
The unequal distribution of positive aspects of technology. Many underdeveloped countries are lacking the basic necessities to survive like food, health, and financial resources.
Instead of having choices, they do not have an option to avail the of fundamental human rights. For example, In daily editions, there is a plethora of articles are publishing.
To conclude this, The people around the globe in this generation are fortunate enough to have all the amenities with plenty of choices. However, people should be cautious while using technology and it would have been equal for everyone.
Akshay KumarMemberAugust 5, 2021 at 9:34 PM
hardeepMemberAugust 6, 2021 at 6:24 AM
These days, Few people feel that we have plenty of options. I do largely agree with the statement and will justify it in following paragraphs of this essay.
As a result of globalization, the world world has become one big market wherein anyone can purchase an item from anywhere in the world. This has also led to availability of large varieties of particular item or service that we intend to purchase. For example while buying a particular piece of apparel, one will get listing from many brands from around the world to choose from unlike in earlier times where it was limited to just local market.
Moreover, evolution of internet has increased the capability to explore more options like undergoing a study online from any university around the world and not limiting to locally accessible one. On the contrary, some people still feel that its repetition of already available choices i.e. just quantitative increase and not qualitative, still the fact remains that we have more hug number of options nowadays which were not present in earlier times.
In conclusion, Nowadays due to globalization and evolution of internet, the world has become one huge marketplace where buyers have many options to choose from and which were not possible in earlier times.
NikitaMemberAugust 6, 2021 at 11:46 AM
According to people this modern life provides with wide range of choices in everything like in education, shopping, food, vacation, etc. Personally, I agree with the statement as the coming time period the facilities and choices have not been restricted.
Firstly, we have been provided with variety of options in the education field than before. For instance, during olden times there wasn’t many demands of education but now people have a large number of opportunities to pick for studying like psychology, history, entrepreneurship, marine studies, business studies, etc. Moreover, not just education but more areas have many choices too like Food. People prefer experimenting with their options with dinning, as they may try to feast on Italian cuisine and the next day of Chinese. Consumers are delighted when presented with different products for comparison so that they can buy the one most adapted to their need or want.
A further area where an individual has a huge number of choices is while deciding for the holidays, be it for destination countries, hotels, Airbnb and places to visit. Many travel agencies are contacted as they offer different packages, sometimes the same package is proposed at a cheaper price in other agencies. In such a situation people enjoy options to choose the best and the most suited. However, it is true that sometimes having a large number of choices can be time consuming for example looking shoes example, looking at different brands of a particular basic good which probably differ in many ways according to their brand name. However, it is always a smart idea to compare and choose the perfect good.
In conclusion, I believe that in today’s world, we have many options to choose from such as in the area of education, food and travelling as people enjoy the choice of options and choose what they prefer best for them.
NileshMemberAugust 6, 2021 at 3:48 PM
The elder group of our society thinks that ample choices are available to this generation compared to their era & I must say, they are absolutely right but sometimes having more options makes people flummox while selecting goods which are really worthy to buy it.
The advent of an Internet has connected each and every corner of the world. Due to the globalization and industrialization of the various sectors has opened door of the international markets to our society. Moreover, giants like Amazon & Ali express has eased our life by bringing international brands and millions of products to our fingertips. For example, in 60’s & 70’s there were only two clothings brands mainly Reymond & Mafatlal are available in the Indian market but nowadays, no young generation is prefers to buy these brands as thousands of varieties are available in market which are more stylish, Vibrant & comparatively gets cheaper due to the Competition between these manufactures so lured customers.
<font face=”inherit”>Consequently, having dozens of choices make people confused while selecting right product for them. The alcratity of individuals leads to wastage of time, energy and loss of tranquility & in few cases customers were cheated by </font>fraudulent<font face=”inherit”> advertisements of products by traders may result in </font>financial lost. Recently, i came across one incident where one fraud company has published add of in expensive fancy and clannish clothes & eventually number of people has ordered from that website but they get deceived as this company has sent stones and paper to the customers instead of cloths. It was big scam. Hence, having number of choices sometimes not helpful while selecting right product.
To conclude on this discussion, undoubtedly current generation has infinite number of choices made available by companies but we have to think cautiously while making right selection by considering factors such as need, authenticity, quality and reputation of the manufacturer.
SumitaMemberAugust 8, 2021 at 12:59 PM
<i style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>In present times multiple options are available everywhere be it buying coffee from a coffee shop, eating food, buying apparels, electronics etc. In this essay we will discuss the extent of choices available and their possible impacts on individuals.
<i style=””>Nowadays, multiple alternatives of everything we need are available and it has many advantages for individuals, society and economy. For example, we have many affordable and cheaper options available for mobiles and laptops which makes it possible for everyone to have access to their benefits whereas two decades ago these were considered luxury items. Also having alternative choices keep companies and businesses motivated to constantly compete, innovate and improve quality of their products along with maintaining affordable pricing. For instance, to buy clothes and dresses we have multiple offline and online avenues – like malls, shops, e-commerce websites like myntra, jabong etc from where people can buy according to their requirements.
<i style=””>But there is flip side of every coin, having too many choices in everyday routine has created problems such as daily stress, indecisiveness and dissatisfaction in people’s lives. Extent of choices can be determined from that fact that many psychological studies are being conducted today to determine negative impacts of choices overload. We have to decide for everything, for example what kind of coffee I need in morning- Latte, Mocha, Expresso etc. Choice making creates a stress, and people often spend too much time in deciding things and often remain indecisive in buying things so it creates unnecessary dissatisfaction of not buying the best. Apart from that people also buy things that are not needed and hence it increases their unnecessary spending so it makes them regret later. Hence, as a society we must focus on this aspect of choices and prepare our younger generation to be conscious of its impact.
In conclusion, people have multiple choices available in every aspect of their life and it has some advantages, but recent studies also show that it has many disadvantages too like mental stress and indecisiveness.
AnureetMemberAugust 9, 2021 at 11:53 AM
INTRODUCTION: don’t add extra information in your paraphrased statement
write main points in your thesis statement
BP1: advantages for- advantages to
do not include we in Formal Essay writing
BP2: that fact- the fact
choices overload- an overload of choices
decide for- decide
Conclusion: summarise the main points clearly
BAND SCORE: 3/6 Keep Writing!
SurajMemberAugust 18, 2021 at 10:27 AM
Many people think that nowadays, they have several options available to choose from for various things in life. I completely agree with this opinion and the following paragraphs explain my reasons with examples and end in a brief conclusion.
In the modern world, with the advent of technology and easy communication people are faced with an increased choice in different aspects of their lives. From simple daily necessities to important life decisions have more options now than before. There are a number of industries with several roles for a person to take up in them. For instance, even a person living in a remote village has access to information from around the world and can choose from learning to be a good farmer or going to a university and become a software engineer.
One main aspect where a varied choice is vividly visible is in the food industry as we have a lot of choice when it comes to food. There are recipes of diverse cuisines available online for anyone to cook from and if someone is too busy to cook and decides to go to a restaurant, he has to choose between the several commutable restaurants around him and then choose what he wants to eat in the long menu provided there. For instance, on one occasion when I decided to order a healthy smoothie for breakfast and selected a nearby outlet of Drunken Monkey, there were 25 distinct fresh fruit smoothies in the menu.
To recapitulate, people have ample choice for every step in their lives like in major career decisions and in simple things like food. While this increased choice brings some color to our lives, it can also be stressful to zero in onto one option.
AnureetMemberAugust 18, 2021 at 1:38 PM
Introduction: Many- Some- don’t change these words while paraphrasing
write main points in your thesis statement which you are going to elaborate in your Body Paragraphs
BP 2: don’t write personal examples
BAND SCORE: 4/6 Keep Writing!
SheebaMemberOctober 7, 2021 at 11:26 AM
Now a days some people believe that we have too many options to choose. In this essay let us see both views by agreeing and disagreeing the opinion on availability of choices.
To begin with, there are many options are available to select. For instance accessories, education, food, travel and job. On seeing many options people are getting confused to select the right option for them. In the last century, the variety of food was not available in a hotel. To have food in different cuisine, people have to select a hotel where the cuisine is available. But now a hotel has variety of cuisine. We can have Italian cuisine, Arabic cuisine, Indian cuisine and Continental dishes at a single hotel. In olden days women used to wear saree and men used to wear shirt and pant. Now there are lehenga and western wears for women and for men sharvani and different types of coat are available. In my childhood the only channel available in television was Doordarshan but, now there are many channels are there.
In addition to it, there are few area we do not have options. During election there is only one way to cast our votes there is no alternate. In the time of delivery there is no option for the women to deliver her child without pain. While attending the competitive exams the candidate has to write their exam in their respective exam center. Few years back, I got selected in the preliminary round in one of the nationalized bank. But for the second round I could not able to attend the exam because I was in my notice period. As I could not take leave I missed the opportunity. So from my perspective choices are not available for few domain.
In conclusion, the more we have options, the harder it will be to choose the best. The options at certain extend will gives interest to choose. Beyond the limit we will get stress to choose the right option.
hariMemberOctober 17, 2021 at 9:42 PM
Some individuals claim that we have numerous options in the current timeframe. I strongly believe in this statement. Let me bolster my opinion with appropriate reasoning and relevant examples.
To begin with, our parents faced many hardships in order to commute and reach their destination due to the lack of adequate transportation facility since they had to rely either on the bus or auto so as to reach their office or home whereas we have a plethora of options to choose from. For instance, I can either choose to travel from Uber or afford to go on Metro rail which not only saves my time but is also comfortable. Therefore, we have multiple avenues to select and utilise.
Secondly, Sophisticated social networking has made our life a smooth ride. While our elders had to tend to the office to carry out their job we can harness the power of software tools to execute even the most complicated tasks in a much simpler manner. For example, By the application of sophisticated tools like Microsoft teams and Whatsapp we can accomplish our job in the comfort of our home. Besides, It is even hard to imagine how the work-life could have been, had the pandemic hit a decade ago. Therefore, technological advancement has been providing us with many options.
To conclude, the availability of sophisticated transportation and technology has endowed us with a myriad of opportunities which our previous generation could not enjoy.
hariMemberOctober 17, 2021 at 10:40 PM
Some individuals claim that we have numerous options in the current timeframe. I strongly believe in this statement. Let me bolster my opinion with appropriate reasoning, relevant examples and a brief conclusion.
To begin with, the Advancement of transportation facilities have widened the scope of commuting to various places now. In the past, our parents faced many hardships in order to commute and reach their destination due to the lack of adequate transportation facility since they had to rely either on the bus or auto so as to reach their office or home whereas we have a plethora of options to choose from. For instance, I can either choose to travel from Uber or afford to go on Metro rail by booking on mobile which not only saves my time but is also comfortable. Therefore, we have comfortable multiple transport avenues to bank on.
Secondly, Sophisticated social networking has made our life a smooth ride. While our elders had to tend to the office to carry out their job we can harness the power of software tools to execute even the most complicated tasks in a much simpler manner. For example, We can attend the office or work-from-home by the application of sophisticated tools like Microsoft Teams, Zoom, etc. Therefore, It is difficult to imagine how the work-life could have been, had the pandemic hit a decade ago thanks to technological advancement that has been providing us with multiple options.
To conclude, the availability of sophisticated transportation and technology has endowed us with a myriad of opportunities which our previous generation could not enjoy.
AbhinavAdministratorOctober 18, 2021 at 6:16 PM
Impressive piece of writing. You use quite complicated sentences with complex and compound sentences. There is use of conditional as well as model verbs. Range is adequate. Lexical resources have been used properly and evenly across the paragraphs. Grammatical accuracy is exceptional and I have nothing to point out. (Phrasing of some sentences could have been better though= I can either choose to travel from Uber or a 4 to go on Metro rail by booking on mobile phone (Mobile simply means on the move), (we have comfortable multiple transport avenues= we have multiple comfortable transport avenues)
This essay is reaching the C2 level in CEFR
Band Score Weightage: 5.5/6.0
hariMemberOctober 18, 2021 at 8:53 PM
Thanks a lot, sir, your feedback has been undoubtedly a source of my improvement!