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  • Writing Task 2: Advantages and disadvantages

     Falak updated 18 hours, 13 minutes ago 6 Members · 15 Posts
  • Falak

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    August 9, 2021 at 5:50 PM
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    The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society.

    Discuss advantages and disadvantages

    Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

  • Arjun

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    August 10, 2021 at 12:25 AM
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    Hi Falak,

    PFA.

    • Arjun

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      August 10, 2021 at 12:39 AM
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      Just to give you a heads up – I tried to upload attachment multiple times but its not saving due to some platform issue (not sure why).

  • Arjun

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    August 17, 2021 at 3:33 PM
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    Hi Falak!

    I tried to upload it yesterday and now as well but it still giving me same issue while uploading it.

    It seems to be a platform issue. Please make it check from platform end.

  • Arjun

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    • Falak

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      Body paragraph 1 : easily (easy) accessibility ; between (among) people

      Body paragraph 2 : People prefer to call or text instead of face-to-face meeting, resulting in weakening of verbal skills. They feel diffident in interacting with others in person


      Feedback : Try to opt for synonyms approach , to make writing more effective.

      Band :3.5/6

  • Roshini

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    • Falak

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      October 5, 2021 at 9:46 AM
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      Social media platform(s) have

      have witnessed tremonous (tremendous)

      in person communication over( over is redundant here) within communities

      i (I) concede

      I suppose the changes have been beneficial (However, I believe that the benefits this shift brings may overshadow the drawbacks).

      B.P 1 : Topic sentence needs to be more precise an so the explanation.

      Band : 2.5/6

  • Roshini

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  • Devi

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    Hi falak,

    I have attached text doc of essay .

    Kindly check.

    • Falak

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      October 13, 2021 at 11:30 PM
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      People throughout the world uses (use) social media to communicate with other(s)(,) using social media platforms (social networking sites) like email, Whatsapp, Facebook, and so many (many more). They prefer to contact with( through) social media rather than face-face (actual interaction) contact because to connect instantly ( as it offers instant connection). (However,) it also includes some drawbacks like depending on electronics devices and privacy issues. Here we will ( this essay will discuss) discuss both benefits and disadvantages briefly.
      Mainly, the digital communication system plays major role in human development. It provides wide variety of features including distant learning, remote working, connecting with people irrespective of place and time. For instance, social media (has) become main source of communication of distance family and friends through video or audio call with no need of charges to contact. Particularly in this global covid-19 pandemic, world depends on social media to stay connected with people in office, family and public to get information and support. It helps (to make ) people more productive and safes (ensures regular contact) relationship in regular contact. Furthermore, It helps people to virtually participate in important family functions include birthday parties, anniversary celebration and so on.
      Even though social media has more benefits, it has some adverse effects (too). in communicate virtually. Specially offspring(s) loses(lose) their interest to communicate in this mode. The online education has limitation to involve them in practical education and also chances of social skills not developed that includes behaviour, personal development, sharing habits. It affects the chances of exploring the places, people and culture along with face-face meeting. Sometimes depending on electronic devices affects health by eye dryness, stress, radiation exposure.
      To conclude, i ( I) believe that usage of social media is more beneficial in evolution of people in society. With improvement in technologies ,people should educate themselves to how to optimize it for (better) communication (and) to avoid health affects

      Feedback: follow essay structure, Make distinct paragraphs. No example found, use punctuation marks to add clarity. Follow the corrections made.

      Band : 2.5/6

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  • Amir Hamza

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    Advantages and disadvantages.

    Question:
    The use of social media is replacing face to face interaction among many people in the society.
    Discuss advantages and disadvantages
    Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

    Answer:
    Social Media has penetrated the lives of many people across the globe. It has provided the opportunity to share and exchange information with each other without any limitations to the national borders or income status. However, excessive use of Social Media has resulted in limited physical interactions among people leading to a lack of social skills among people. As with the case with many others, the excessive of anything has side effects, so is the case with Social Media. However, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of using Social Media.

    Social Media transcends geographies and income boundaries. Easy accessibility and availability through a mobile smart phone to various applications meant that many people across the globe, without any limitations to their income, are able to take full benefit of Social Media. With a greater number of using Social media, the demand for Social Media services increased. The demand for services further led to two more benefits: First, boosting economy through the creation of top companies. Facebook, Twitter and LinkedIn are among the top companies of the world contributing to the growing GDP and taxes. Second, these large companies created jobs and further provided livelihoods to many subsidiary companies. It also gave an opportunity to budding entrepreneurs to market their products and create a source of income. Lastly, Social Media has empowered the populace to voice their opinion, showcase their skill without any institutional support. Justin Bieber is a strong example of the power of social media. Marketing himself on YouTube, helped him to grow faster and gain international recognition and acceptance.

    Despite its many advantages, Social Media has disadvantages as well. Social Media mainly hinges on content sharing. Content sharing contributes negatively when the majority use Social Media to watch videos, share memes or send forward messages. Social Media can also be a disruptor as it has led to people sharing fake news and create news for their own benefits. The use of Social Media on non-productive tasks means limited availability of time catering to productive tasks. Besides the above, one of the outcomes of use of Social Media is limited physical interaction leading to lack of development of social skills among people.

    The advantages and opportunities of use of Social Media outweigh the disadvantages and limitations due to it. It is important for the users to be aware of both sides of use of Social Media and to use it optimally.

    • Falak

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      October 19, 2021 at 9:56 PM
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      the excessive (use) of anything has side effects,/( The excess of anything)

      With a greater number of using Social media( owing to its various benefits), the demand for Social Media services increased.

      (To conclude,)The advantages and opportunities of use of Social Media outweigh the disadvantages and limitations due to it

      Feedback : Disadvantages could be more aligned to the question as how social media is impacting the verbal skills and emotional quotient perhaps (feeling of isolation, fear of conversations and many more other than that no complaints.

      Band : 3/6

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