[Unknown Member]

After completing their first punishment, most of the culprits tends to repeat more offences. This can mainly be due to the lack of serious penalty. In this essay the causes behind this serious issue and several measures that can help the authorities solve this problem will be discussed.

To begin with the first reason that the offenders are committing more crimes is the lack of severe punishment, as a result of which, it is taken more casually by the criminals. In addition to this, when different people are locked up in one prison, they do not have anything to do apart from chit-chat, however, end up sharing their information and some of them even provoke them to take their revenges. Furthermore, after being released when they are faced by the society, the ignorance and unemployment again encourage them to do the same.

There is a great need to solve this problem so that criminals stay away from more crimes. More rehabilitation centers should be offered by the government wherein the criminals are taught and made to learn new skills which will help them find a job. Regular check and supervision on offenders after coming out of prisons will alert and prevent them taking any further action towards crime. More and more work should be assigned to the prisoners in jail which will keep them busy and get less time to talk to other criminals.

In conclusion, if proper training in prisons is provided and continuous check is kept while coming out for the first time, the numbers of crimes will eventually be decreased.

[Unknown Member]

Introduction-authorities solve- authorities to solve. Follow method 1 of introduction- Paraphrase+ thesis statement otherwise the chance of committing mistakes increases

BP 1- as a result- rephrase this line as-as a result, prisoners take their punishment casually

however end up line has mistakes.

[Unknown Member]

BP 1- Rephrase this line with however

BP 2- stay away- incorrect collocation- write: refrain from committing more crimes

prevent them taking- prevent them from taking

towards crime- not required

use synonyms of committing crimes where possible

Conclusion- while coming out- substitute once they have served their punishment

eventually, be decreased- eventually decrease

Note: You have done a good job but this essay requires a little bit of fine tuning

Band Score- 4/6

[Unknown Member]

Thank you mam. I will surely work on it.

[Unknown Member]

It is often seen that offenders tend to get involved in more crimes after they serve their first punishment. This can be attributed to either merciful treatment or excessively harsh treatment in the prison. This essay will discuss various reasons along with certain changes which can be helpful to solve this problem.

The majority of the people get indulged in criminal activities due to their life situations. Some feel they were treated unfairly or others are compelled by the financial situations. When asked, these people are found to reply with the most desperate needs to commit the crime. Also, it seems our judiciary system does not punish them as required. The punishments are either too lenient that it does not cast any effect on the people or they are too harsh which makes them numb and ignorant towards the system.

The reason for making criminal laws is to instil fear in the mind of the people and thereby, prevent them from committing any dangerous or unethical activity. For example, the death penalty for rape will definitely induce a deep threat in the minds of individuals. Further to this, it is suggested that the norms should also acknowledge criminal psychology. A sound understanding of the same can help to decide the quantum of punishment required for a particular case. If the accused has some inevitable reason, counselling along with material help can be provided which might give him/her a reason to believe in higher good and own betterment.

In conclusion, the psyche behind the evil act needs to be understood and facilitated to provide a new perspective about life and which would eventually make the world a better and safer place to live.

[Unknown Member]

[Unknown Member]

Introduction- lack in giving punishment- lack of

Thesis statement does not have main points

Bp1- one of the main reason- main reasons

Dont quote source in your example amd don’t use continuous tense unnecessarily

Bp 2- criminals should provide- should be

Police are- Police is- Police is always singular

Note: Need to work on your thoughts and clarity. You will improve gradually.

Band Score- 2.5/6

[Unknown Member]

Recently it was shown that lots of criminals commit more crimes after they serve their time in prison. There are several reasons that led them to do such act and some measures to be taken to mitigate this problem that will be explained in the following paragraphs.

To begin with, it is difficult for the offenders to surmount the languished time they were locked away in jails, so they seek revenge. For example, a murderer might stock the officer who caught him and hurt him or his family members. Moreover, criminals are persecuted by society for what they have done which results in being rejected even if they atone for their past sins. To elaborate, drunk drivers who kill other people while driving their cars obliviously, struggle to get accepted by their community after they are absolved and try to corroborate for their repentance.

To overcome this problem, many actions can be taken by both, society and the offenders. First, it is important to engage the people who get released from prisons in support groups to interact with people who had similar experiences. For instance, design groups for killers in which they can express their feelings and get guidance during their recovery time. Another point is that to conduct public awareness campaigns that teach public people how to accept criminals and treat them well after languishing in prisons. To explain, providing general lectures and conferences about how to treat such people and not to reproach them for what they committed in the past.

In conclusion, committing crimes by offenders after their first crime is a huge problem that can be solved by addressing the reasons, seeking help and providing the support needed.

[Abhinav]

Stock= Stalk

Teach public people? =Teach People

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