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Writing Task 2: Discuss both views (climate change)
Some people think climate change has a negative impact on business, while others think that it provides more business options. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.
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Body Paragraph 1 : To elaborate (more), more is redundant here.
Climate can be drastically impacted if there will be a flood (Agricultural sector can be impacted adversely with intensive climatic changes)
poor harvesting makes farmers (peasantry) more ( comparative form of poor is poorer ; not more poorer) poorer (helpless) and less demand in products (great loss in crop yields)
In short (apparently) , such things is (are) not under control
Body paragraph 2 : Not convinced with content related to MNC
Conclusion : Try to state the argument completely , followed by your opinion
Feedback : Need to work on sentence structure.
band : 3/6
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@fal kindly evaluate my passage.
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@fal kindly evaluate my passage
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bad : detrimental, adverse
it also effect (affects)- understand the difference between affect and effect
changes gives (give)
people think (profess) that
metrological (meteorological)
people from other country (countries)
generating giving (choose one either generating or giving) business
tibet (Tibet)
I was looking for more affirmation in conclusion as in introduction.
Keep writing!!
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It is often argued that global warming affects the business negatively, whilst other disagree and think that it creates more openings in business. While the climate change provides few new business alternatives, I believe that it has a serious effect on human life as well as on business.
On the one hand, there are many new business openings have been created in all over world. A good example of this is the sell rate of Air conditioners, refrigerators increased drastically in the Asian and African countries, where people are not able to cope up with the unbearable heat in summer. Therefore, they are ended with buying air conditioner or refrigerator to survive.
On the other hand, farmers are the most vulnerable group in terms of extensive climate variety. The unpredictable climate change results in poor crop quality, at the same time the lack of rain water or sometimes heavy rain spoils the harvesting which results in great loss in their livelihoods. Recently many plants grew in the deserts of Arabian countries, which is a shocking and unbelievable news. As a result of this, locusts are able to reach India and Bangladesh, and spoils the harvesting in a great extent. Earlier they were not able to do this as they were not able to cross Arabian Sea due to lack of food. But, now they are able to do so as they getting their food from the new plants of Arabian Desert.
In conclusion, although climate change enhances few business areas, overall it impacts overall business negatively, and need serious attention from all of us.
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‘In adversity, lies opportunity’ is a famous phrase and also a truth that we can observe in the business. Although, it is an opinion of masses that climate has deteriorated businesses there are others who believe that it has opened doors to newer opportunities. This essay will illustrate the adverse effects and also positive outlook of environment shift.
To begin with, since industrial revolution various vehicular, aviation and arms industries are heavily relying on natural resources such as fossil fuels. As a result, global warming increased which in turn affected the working of ecosystem. In addition, ill-effects such as acid rains, floods and droughts have caused detrimental effect on agriculture which in turn harmed the organizations that are dependent on such agricultural resources. For instance, special medicines that are used to treat serious ailments which require certain plants are scarcely available due to their lack of growth. Hence, damaged atmospheric conditions have caused baneful effect to some businesses.
On the contrary, different inventions as well as innovations have emerged to tackle the global warming, thereby allowing many fresh business ventures to prosper. In particular, the automobile industry where newer companies are comping up with variety of vehicles based on electricity, hydrogen and renewable energy sources. As a result, governments of different countries are also promoting such opportunities. Therefore, some positive outcomes have been also come into light from climate change.
In conclusion, I strongly agree that climate change has brought more harm than good to businesses, despite the newer innovations of certain industries.
TIME TAKEN :- 41 minutes
Start time:- 9:40 Pm
End time :- 10:21 pm
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tackle the global warming, (this environmental shift)
Although, it is an opinion of masses that climate has deteriorated businesses (when) there are others who believe that it
This essay will illustrate the adverse effects and also positive outlook of environment shift. (along with my opinion)
global warming (has) increased which
I would suggest to come with one more reason for B.P 2, as we need to develop both arguments equally
to draw conclusion instead of being repetitive with as a result , we can also use “Hence”, “thus”, “consequently”
would like to see more variety of sentence structures (complex)
Keep writing!!!
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explosion (explanation) of my opinion
is affecting to “to” is not required) agriculture
cyclones (force people ) to change the habitat
For instance(,)
Mango session (season) start(s)
have not get mangoes (?) – faulty sentence structure
develope (develop)
has (is) affecting
in my consider (opinion)
To conclusion (conclude)
explanations are not effective especially in B.P 2 and there is strong need to work on basic sentence structure and tenses.
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In Introduction, similar sentence structure , humans ….. however, humans…… ( paraphrase it effectively)
make sure “r” and “u” should be clear. There are certain words which I failed to understand because of this.
second body paragraph has not been presented as question demanded , it talks about the solutions we have to combat the situation, but question was what are the other opportunities. It is inclined to partially developed essay.
keep writing!!
Band: 3/6
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In modern Capitalistic society, any talks of Climate change also gives rise to discussion on its impact on Businesses. This essay analyses both positive and negative impact Climate Change has on Businesses.
To begin with, Climate change corresponds to changes in weather patterns, increase in sea level and certain incomprehensible natural phenomenon. It gives rise to natural disasters like Tsunami, Flooding, Drought, and forest fires. For instance, when one operates a Business in an Island, there is fear that rising Sea levels may destroy the Industrial unit located in the Island. This is a huge loss to the Business and it may lead to Bankruptcy. This could also instill fear among workers who are asked to work in an area prone to destruction by changing Climatic conditions. In another instance, if an Industry operates in a region prone to Forest fires, which are more likely to occur due to extreme heat due to changing climatic trends, the Business can incur losses if the Unit gets burned. Thus it is a very legitimate thought process that Climate change has a negative impact on Business.
On the other hand, Climate change also presents opportunities to Business. First, there are Business opportunities evolving that promotes Sustainability. In such businesses, Green practices are followed, Transportation that is environment friendly is being built and as the central part of Climate change debate is changing one’s own day to day life, many personal hygiene products businesses that makes environment friendly products, are emerging. Also, there are great deal of interest in controlling emissions in Vehicles, as Emissions cause depletion of Ozone layer, and thus emergence of Electric vehicles have provided new investment opportunities. Thus, Climate change have lead to new business opportunities.
In conclusion, Climate Change plays a significant role in modern life, and thus has a direct impact on the way Businesses operate. Though natural calamities resulting from Climate change have greater negative impact on Businesses, they also have given rise to new Businesses opportunities in the areas of sustainability, green practices and also for businesses countering the Climate change.
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This essay analyses both positive and negative impact Climate Change has on Businesses. (along with my opinion)
unit located in (on) the Island
there are great deal(s) of interest
Thus, Climate change have (has) lead (led) to new business opportunities.
In conclusion, I advise to state your opinion with better affirmation
words like ( climate change, business are repetitive )
Keep writing!!
Band: 4/6
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In the modern era, climate change is very debatable topic which may help to boost the economy or loss of the business, in the following paragraph will give the details of positive and negative impact on business.
To begin with the negative impact, The changing of the weather patterns, increasing of the mean sea level and the increasing of the deforestation or any natural phenomena, which may bring the Tsunami, Cyclone, draught and flood, and which may lead to destroy the already setup industrial units in that area or island where cyclone or blood hits. Which incur the business loss, company may become bankruptcy. In addition to this working professional or workers may feel fear of it. Hence this will directly Impact on the business in the particular prone area. Furthermore, In some of the areas Industrial units may get burned by the forest fire broke due to the excessive or extreme heat. All these points which are mentioned above will impact on the business loss.
On the other hand, due to the climate change, Government or private stake holder promote the sustainability or work on the renewal energy, which may create the job opportunity for making the products/research works to survive the people in the bad climate, it can generate the multiple disease or health problems for the treating patients or check-ups, the hospitals to be setup. For sailing the hygiene products first needs to manufacture these products, So for manufacturing these products industries needs to be setup, this will improve the economy or by generate the labours requirements, Now a days government is promising to make the world emission free(Green House gases) or environment friendly. For Instance Emerging the Electric vehicles in our country, the government or private organisation promoting these vehicles through the advertisements and for the manufacturing of these vehicles or its part, industries are required to be built and which may lead to increase the business productivity.
To the conclusion, As my opinion I would say climate change is badly effect the business rather than the positive impact but still some of the positive impact on the economy by setting of the more industries to maintain the sustainability.
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in the following paragraph(s)
natural phenomena, which may bring (is responsible/ can cause) the Tsunami, Cyclone, draught
cyclone or blood (flood) hits.
company may become bankruptcy. (bankrupt)
In addition to this (,) working professional
Hence (,) this will directly Impact on (“on is not required) the business
above will (have adverse/ detrimental) impact on the business
the hospitals (need) to be setup.
industries needs to be setup (Industrial growth will be witnessed)
For instance (,)
I would say climate change is badly (has negative impact on business) effect the business rather than the positive impact
Band : 3/6
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