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  • WRITING TASK 2: OPINION ESSAY

    Posted by Anureet on August 31, 2021 at 9:58 AM

    Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

    Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

    Write at least 250 words.

    Anureet replied 2 years, 7 months ago 8 Members · 13 Replies
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  • jaidheesh

    Member
    September 1, 2021 at 11:38 AM

    More money must be spent on building railways by the government than on roads. In my opinion, I completely agree with this statement as it helps in reducing the traffic on roads by producing a faster and more efficient transport system.

    These days, the traffic on roads has become the main problem, especially during rush hours. The congestion and bottlenecks on roads have been a key factor for slowing our productivity and cause unnecessary energy wastage. By building more railways not only does it provide a different alternative than road transport but also is much faster and quicker. People can use the railways to get from a place to another with less time wastage and hence be more constructive at work.

    Fuels like petrol and diesel are very expensive and are what drive most cars. Nowadays, electric trains provide a cleaner solution and are non-combustible. Less toxic waste emitted means a cleaner environment and pollutant-free world. Another point is that railways help in developing suburban areas and outskirts where a railway station is built. Normally people prefer to live in cities despite the higher living cost just for the convenience’s sake of traveling. But with the introduction of railway stations in rural areas people can also cut down the travel time. This also helps in the wide-scale infrastructural development of remote towns and other localities near the vicinity of the railway station.

    To recapitulate, railways help in the growth of the country by the development of rural areas and also reduces the congestion in cities that depend on extensive roadway transport.

    • Anureet

      Member
      September 2, 2021 at 8:58 AM

      Introduction- by producing- leading to

      BP1: By building- building

      does it provide- creates

      the railways- railways

      get- go

      hence be- hence, can be

      BP2: Fuels- fuel

      are what drive most cars- rephrase

      Band Score: 3/6 Keep Writing!

  • Madhumitha

    Member
    September 1, 2021 at 2:53 PM

    Building an efficient and commutable transport system is a major responsibility of the government of a country. Some people think that more money should be invested on railway system, while others think that roadways should be concentrated on more. This essay will discuss why money spent on railways is far more effective than roadways.

    One of the major advantages of railways is that it causes less environmental pollution compared to vehicles on roads, which causes detrimental effects to the nature. Rail transportation provides less damage to the atmosphere, hence making the earth a better place to live in. Many countries have cut down the amount of CO2 released into the air by adopting public transportation methods. The more money spent on building an efficient railway system, the more the people will start using them, hence making a pollution less environment.

    Travelling in trains helps office-goers to reach their work on time, since there is no traffic problems unlike road travel, therefore they will be more productive at their job. This would help people complete their work on time, thereby reducing the working hours. For example, many companies encourage their employees to use rail transportation to commute to work, hence reducing their travel time. Hence, railways have proven benefits in saving people’s time.

    In conclusion, railways play a significant role in reducing environmental pollution and it also proves to be a time saving mode of transport compared to roadways, therefore, governments should concentrate more on providing a better rail system to its citizens rather than investing money on roads.

  • Arvind

    Member
    September 1, 2021 at 3:04 PM

    The government should invest more money in railways than on roads. I agree with this statement as railways are much safer means of transport and also offer better inter-city and intra-city connectivity.

    In today’s fast paced world travelling has become a necessity. The available public transport is not able to meet the present requirements. For some people travelling is also a passion, as a result they tend to have their own vehicles for their commute. This trend has grown exponentially in the recent years and has led to increase in traffic, roadside accidents, rise in fuel consumption. It has also had a significant impact on the environment, the emissions from these vehicles have reduced the air quality drastically giving rise to several respiratory diseases resulting in poor health.

    In order to counteract the above issues the government should consider investing in railways as it is an efficient means of transport as compared to road transport. Each train will have a pre-determined routes and schedules, which means that people can reach their destination in-time. This will also reduce the travelling time which in-turn helps increasing the productivity. Since each train runs on its own track the possibility of accidents greatly reduces. The development of electric trains has been a boon to us, it has not only reduced the travelling time time but has also contributed in regulating the pollution levels.

    I conclude by saying that the development of railways will bring about a significant change in our lives and also help improving a nation’s economy.

    • Anureet

      Member
      September 2, 2021 at 9:49 AM

      Introduction- in railways- on railways

      BP1: led to increase- led to an increase

      roadside accidents, rise in fuel consumption- roadside accidents and rise in fuel consumption

      BP2: routes and schedules- route and schedule

      in time- on time

      Conclusion- summaries the main points clearly

      Band Score: 3/6 Keep Writing!

  • Sohil

    Member
    September 2, 2021 at 9:38 AM
    • Anureet

      Member
      September 3, 2021 at 9:43 AM

      Introduction- prove to- prove to be

      Start your sentence from extreme left hand side. If you indent- leave space then it will be counted as a new Body Paragraph

      Follow the format of Essay

      Use conclusion linkers to begin your conclusion

      Handwriting is unclear.

      Ideas are good

      Band Score: 4/6 Keep Writing

  • Abhineet

    Member
    September 2, 2021 at 9:57 AM

    Money must be spent as per the requirement whether it comes to the railways or the road infrastructure. In my point of view, certainly there is a good number of population who is using these two modes of transports and hence building an efficient transport system is the responsibility of a government of a country. The below facts depicts the importance of these two modes of transportations.

    These days, we see that railway is enhancing their infrastructure by increasing more number of tracks where the traffic is significantly high. This is a demand-supply model where railway officials are putting more focus on their current infrastructure as well as developing the new tracks in both urban and rural places. Not everyone can afford to travel by road as the cost of the commutation is pretty high and less convenient and hence the government is focusing on the railways to make commutation cheap, affordable and comfortable for everyone.

    Alongside, the road commutation is also one of the biggest mode of transportation and government must spend a considerable amount of budget to modernize its infrastructure. There are hilly places, where it is quite difficult to develop the railway tracks and then it only comes to the road transport through which people do travel and the daily commodities can be transported. Although we see that the fuel consumption is a little high on the road transport which leads to air and noise pollution as well but the above facts can not deny the importance of the road infrastructure.

    To summaries this, railways and road transport plays a vital role in a nation’s economy and their development. Government should equally focus on these two sectors. The more government spend on these sectors, the strengthen country’s economy will be.

    • Anureet

      Member
      September 3, 2021 at 9:59 AM

      Introduction- paraphrase your question statement without adding anything extra

      Write a clear thesis statement incorporating your main points

      BP1: their infrastructure- its infrastructure

      The new tracks- new tracks

      You have to state a clear position explaining to what extent you agree.

      Article The is incorrectly used in the body paragraphs.

      Band Score:3/6 Keep Writing!

  • Sri

    Member
    September 3, 2021 at 3:15 PM
  • Gurleen

    Member
    September 6, 2021 at 4:17 PM

    Some commentators believe that government should spend more money on improving railways infrastructure rather than diverting its spendings on building highways and improving the road systems. However, I am strongly inclined to the view that the government should allocate its budget in a balanced way for both roads as well railways.

    On the one hand, private cars play a vital role in our everyday lives and are the most efficient means of transportation for shorter distances. Commuting by roads is convenient and comfortable for most of the people. Furthermore, roads can reach everywhere and provide connectivity to shopping malls, hospitals and banks. The construction and maintenance of roads will lead to a better traffic management and will also reduce the number of road accidents. For example, a survey report in London suggested that with the increase in the money spend on roads, the number of road accidents declined.

    On the other hand, railways have better connectivity with larger areas of the city. They are preferred by people for travelling long distances since it saves time and reduces traffic congestion. Additionally, modern rails operate with electricity which do not cause pollution in the environment. If the government increases its spending towards railways in improving the hygiene conditions, rail tracks and multiple time slots, they will be more preferred by the people.

    In conclusion, I would say that roads and railways are complimentary means of transportation and government must set an organised plan to improve both the means of transportation.

    • Anureet

      Member
      September 9, 2021 at 10:42 AM

      INTRODUCTION: Some commentators- unnecessary

      you have to take a clear stand in your thesis statement

      BP 1: lives- life

      don’t write the country name in your example

      BAND SCORE: 3.5/6 Keep Writing!

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