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  • WRITING TASK 2- OPINION ESSAY (BUSINESS)

     Sheeba updated 2 weeks, 2 days ago 19 Members · 29 Posts
  • Anureet

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    September 7, 2021 at 9:09 AM
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    Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local businesses are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local businesses will bring about the death of local communities.

    To what extent do you agree or disagree?

  • Neha

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    September 8, 2021 at 1:02 AM
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    Over the period globalization and industrialization have shown extensive growth in bringing up changes in the market. Rise in supermarkets across all the countries have definitely raised the bar for small businesses. In my opinion former is more beneficial to once own country than the stagnant and under developed latter.

    Firstly by improvising older shops and platforms there is drastic change in the purchasing behavior of every individual as a customer. Such changes bring amazing offers and comfort to the people as hypermarkets provide better prizes compared to the adjacent shops. Researches must have been conducted in big cities where supermarkets store more products than the smaller shops. This also indicates that discounts on their products might be high.

    Second of all if the question is about the small business communities, the owners here should consider focusing on the development and growth of the retail. Despite of the tranquility in the smaller businesses, there is always a room for betterment and this is possible when they consider the opposite as a model for change and collaborate instead of considering them as a completion. For instance, local shop keepers who sell particular products like handmade soaps can approach marketing executives to display their products. This indeed leads to growth of opportunities in building up chains.

    To conclude, I strongly disagree that local businesses are dying due to the development of supermarkets. I believe healthy competitions should always be encouraged and taken positively.

  • Tanya

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    September 8, 2021 at 6:58 PM
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    The advent of supermarkets has attracted the population to such an extent that the small and local shops are not able to compete with them and as a result, many of them are now on the verge of closure. Will this lead to the end of local communities? Let us have a deeper look into this topic and in the end, I will provide my opinion on this.

    Supermarkets, a large place where the foods and all the necessary household goods are being sold, are great for those who like shopping under one roof as it saves time and effort. On the other hand, for some people, these stores are the result of unnecessary expenses. For instance, if we are going for a grocery shopping from a supermarket, we are often tempted by other things like frozen food and therefore buy them without realising that if it is required or not.

    On the contrary, the local shops are present at almost every corner of a street which provides ease of buying things at any point of time without travelling far. Also, grocery shops, for example, contain limited varieties of products and hence individuals buy the things which are needed. Not only this, there is the chance of better customer satisfaction as local communities are quite old in the society and know the need of the local people.

    Undoubtedly, the past few years have shown the rapid development of these big stores but I don’t agree that this will result in the death of local communities as both types have their own benefits and drawbacks. However, I suggest that individuals should consider buying from the local communities as well because, for many people, these shops are the only source of their livelihood.

  • Deepak

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    September 8, 2021 at 9:45 PM
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    It has been a burning question, especially in a country like India where social and economic decisions largely depend upon political motives, that supermarkets are killing small businesses as well as jeopardizing the source of income of local communities. I partially agree with such a thought process and in the subsequent paragraphs, I shall be expressing my views on both sides of the coin.

    Can we imagine our urban lives without supermarkets such a Big Bazar or Reliance Mart? I think no because our lifestyle has changed a lot and it is continually evolving. Moreover, in few years down the line, it will further change tremendously. In the current era, everyone is running short of time and each one of us wants to have comfort in every aspect of his life and this brings supermarkets into the picture as they offer an assortment of products under one roof that too at the prices lower than neighboring business and ultimately making the consumer a winner. Moreover, these large markets are providing employment to a lot of people and are giving fire to the economic engine of the country. This price war has forced local businesses to rationalize their prices to remain relevant.

    Change is the only permanent thing in this world and to remain in business, these small businesses must innovate in order to survive, rather than lobbying against hypermarkets and building political pressure. As an alternative, these people may become suppliers for these hypermarkets and continue to flourish. Moreover, ours is a very big country and everyone can have a slice in this big pie, hence neighboring shops will continue to receive business and I do not see the end of this era in near future, provided these business owners evolve and transform themselves.

    Finally, I would like to reiterate that although hypermarkets are flourishing in every nook and corner of our country, small businesses will continue to survive if they have the desire to do so.

  • Nitish

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    September 15, 2021 at 9:35 PM
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    Undoubtedly, supermarkets are a one-stop solution for everyone’s needs and consumers can buy all the necessary things without going to multiple shops. In some nations, micro-businesses are facing detrimental effects and struggling to withstand against enlargement of hypermarkets. Even it is believed by some people that it leads to the end of local communities. I disagree with the point that shutting-down of local shops will end the era of the local community.

    First and foremost, with globalization and modernization, the advancement of shopping is inevitable and it augments employment for locals in different regions because of their culture-specific elements. To run the stores efficiently, macro enterprises have to hire local-lite people who can communicate in the local language and attract more local customers. For example, Walmart store in Bangalore city stresses hiring employees who know Kannada, which is Bangalore’s regional language. As a result, local people will get more employment opportunities.

    Secondly, hypermarkets bring the local communities’ cultures on the international platform. This is because they encourage local products and export them to other provinces and nations. Thus, providing a much wider platform as compared to small shops. For instance, Indian recipes which were earlier limited to a particular region are now available in almost all international stores. Therefore, local communities are recognized worldwide.

    To conclude, although superstores are diminishing the small business, they are playing a vital role in boosting regional cultures. Therefore, I strongly disagree that the closure of small-scale outlets will ruin the local community.

  • Kanchan

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    September 16, 2021 at 8:41 PM
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    I don’t completely agree on the fact that expansion of supermarkets in the country lead to the closure of local or small business however this can affect the growth of local businesses since customer plays a vital role in the growing ladder of any business no matter how small or large. Going forward I would like to share my opinion on the mentioned subject.

    There is no doubt in the increasing number of supermarkets in some countries which attracts most the population since it’s a place where one can find anything which is needful in daily life or even things which are not basic. One only need to go to a single place and can get anything they want whether it is about clothes or groceries or some electrical appliance and what not!

    However, the expansion of such supermarkets somewhere affects the small or local businesses since the privileged people would like to go to such supermarkets rather than going to local shops and roaming around different places to buy the stuffs. But we can’t say that this can lead to the complete shutdown of local businesses since the local community who are not capable to purchase things from such supermarkets will definitely do their shopping from local shops.

    In the end, by taking local or unprivileged people into consideration I would like to conclude that no matter how much the supermarkets are going to expand in a country, but this can never lead to closure of small businesses. However, it will surely impact their business financially.

    • Admin

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      Feedback: Need to work on approach, sentence formation repetition of words and Cohesive devices and grammatical mistakes highlighted above in bold.

      Band: 2/6

  • Mohit

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    September 17, 2021 at 8:58 PM
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    The expansion of super markets , may outweigh the tenuous local community business. Many people believe that the big malls are a short of death warrant of street shopkeeper. I strongly disagree with the statement.

    Super market is a short of whole sale market , which were even existed before. Since beginning, people have propensity to buy from the whole sale market, which are now appeared as super market. For example people used to prepare the list of the wanted ware and then go to the whole sale market and then purchased the goods from there. Yes, the small purchasing are used to be done from the local market. So the existence of supermarket will not do any harm to local business community.

    Secondly, local business market community , has a strong relationship with the customer, and many of the customer who are in want of credit , purchase the goods from them only. For example , many of the local customer finish their salary in the first 10 days of the month only, and after word in any need of things they always rely on credits which, of course can be lended by the local shopkeeper and that too on the basis of face value only, therefore it will be very hard to root out the local business community.

    Finally , the challenge, facing by the local business community from Supermarket is not a new one. based on their accessibility to the local customer and their relationship with the customer will not let them forsake from the market.

  • Prabhjeet

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    September 17, 2021 at 9:05 PM
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    In the modern era, people resort to going to malls and marts rather than choosing local businesses because of the plethora of options supermarkets offer, and hence it is argued that the local shops suffer at the expense of supermarket expansion because they fail to compete with them and this will eventually lead to the demise of local communities. But to what extent is the statement true? Let us dive deeper into this topic.

    On the one hand, supermarkets are a one-stop shop for a variety of necessities whether it be groceries, personal care equipment or electronics. They often utilise prudent knowledge of psychology to lure people into buying more and hence fortifying their profits. For example, even if you end up buying only what you desired according to your shopping list but at the end, the sophisticated inclusion of chocolates and chewing gums around the billing counter would definitely tempt you.

    On the other hand, local shops are meant for a restricted range of goods to cater to the needs of those who are living around the locality. Moreover, the employees are more friendly in nature hence you would end up liking the shopping experience for sure. Since the local businesses cannot compete with the flamboyant decorations and in-store experience of bigger marts, they sometimes let the neighbours buy cheap items on credit hence enhancing the customer satisfaction.

    To conclude, though the supermarkets offer a variety of resources at one place, still local shops come in play when you have a shorter shopping list or are short in time. Hence, in my opinion, the local shops will still prevail even after the supermarkets increase because they still cater to specific needs which cannot be fulfilled by the latter.

    • Abhinav

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      September 17, 2021 at 9:12 PM
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      On one hand, no need of article

      Could use a little more grammatical range. However that is sufficient to give you a good score.

      Task achievement complete

      Grammatical accuracy good

      Lexical resources are utilised properly in relevant places

      Coherence and cohesion can be improved by incorporating more cohesive devices in conjunctions.

      Band score a weightage: 5.0/6.0

  • siddhu

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    September 17, 2021 at 9:09 PM
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    Recently, people are tending towards super markets and malls due to their aggressive endorsement, and many argue that this will obsolete the local businesses due to their incompetency. I do agree to certain extent, however, taking necessary action plan would retrieve the situation back. This essay will discuss further on this context and form a conclusion.

    To embark on, super markets gives more flexibility to the customers. Generally, it is considered as a one stop for all the daily requirements, moreover, these platforms provide wide range of collections. However, sometimes this can be specious to purchase unnecessary items and increase the expenses. For instance, in most these malls, there would be discounts sales running but with certain clauses. Although, we know that some items are not really recovered yet, this will make the customers tenuous and end up increasing their budget which would be significantly different from what they have decided.

    On the other hand, local markets are considered as outdated. To put it in other words, these have very limited appeal in variety and not does not provide any discounts on purchases which is making the situation exacerbate. It is true that, these are finding difficulty in sustenance, due to which it is having a decline trend, however, this is not a encouraging sign for the local traders who are dependent on this and this can be changed. For example, local markets can have tie-ups with moderated organizations in providing the local goods and also stretch themselves in providing home deliveries, as a results of these efforts the situation can be reconciled.

    From the aforesaid statements, there is no denying fact that, local communities are getting a toil from the supermarkets and malls. However, in my opinion, having appropriate measures in place can bolster their competencies and revive back to their normal status in the societies.

  • Seema

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    September 17, 2021 at 9:10 PM
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    There’re many small and local shopkeepers facing loss due to the new style of purchasing things from supermarkets and malls. Local businesses are only way to earn money for some people so it can definitely harm those people whose life is running because of these small shops. But yes there’re also people who earn less in this world and who cannot afford buying things from malls and supermarkets so I don’t agree that closure of local businesses can bring death of local communities.


    Local shops are the shops which we can find at every corner of the street. Additional benefits of these local shops are that it opens early in the morning and closes late at night. Hence people urgently need anything can get down from home and buy the things which is urgently needed as it’s easily accessible. For example, If a single parent is there at home and not well to cook the food so he or she can go nearby shop early in the morning and can buy ready to eat foods for children’s tiffin like bread, butter & Jam etc.


    Alternatively, Malls and Supermarkets can be seen far away from local areas as it needs space for the infrastructure. Infrastructure of malls and supermarkets are way too expensive as it involves multiple shops in one market where if one person wants to buy each and everything related to home, then can buy from malls but at a higher rate. For example, If someone buys one kilogram sugar, it can cost him or her 60 rupees which actually costs 44 rupees per kilogram and includes additional taxes which supermarket pays for infrastructure, electricity etc.


    So conclusion to my statement is that local shops are easily accessible with affordable price so there’re still people who prefers local shops instead of malls for shopping, hence the death of local community is not possible due to developed supermarkets and malls.

    • Abhinav

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      September 23, 2021 at 5:14 PM
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      Your introduction is not according to the IELTS parameters. You have mentioned some reasons in your introduction which should not be there. Put all your reasons in the body paragraphs instead of introduction.

      Your first body paragraph is not giving a reason but you are telling about the benefits of local shopkeepers. That is not something the question is asking. You are going off topic.

      Even the second body paragraphs follows the same style. You’re supposed to give you reasons why or why not supermarkets are cannibalise in the local shops along with examples.

      I’m not going to give you a BAND score for this since it does not follow the question.

  • Harsaroop Kaur

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    September 17, 2021 at 9:11 PM
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    Expansion is happening at a really fast pace and to run along with the world, if we find all our daily necessities under one roof; it feels very convenient. However, some people believe that it can mar the local communities. I partially agree to this and would be expressing my views on both points.
    Nowadays, if we look to buy a new house, the very first thing that we look for is the locality. We check that from where we are going to buy daily house-hold stuff. That’s when the supermarkets come in picture. I am living in Delhi away from my family and my work shift timings are from 12 noon to 9:30 p.m. Because of this schedule, I don’t get time to buy daily necessities and at that time Supermarkets are quite beneficial because everything is available under one roof, moreover it feels safe to buy stuff from there even at late nights.
    One the other hand, local businesses are short on budget so they stock up only those items which are frequently bought from the store, therefore they are short on variety. People of today’s generation need to stuff every day to explore and some people have made a business out of this. Nowadays people follow new trends and they need everything which is advertised on the social media.
    To conclude, some people are earning their daily bread from the local businesses and they are really getting affected by supermarkets. We can play a small part from our end by buying things from them, this would affect our comfort zone but that’s a little part we can do.

    • Abhinav

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      September 23, 2021 at 5:17 PM
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      The structure and the content written in your essay is not answering the question. You are also going off topic. The question asks whether closure of local businesses affects local communities. You haven’t given an example of closing down the businesses and its effect. You need to compare supermarkets and local shopkeepers and try to explain both views.

  • Rajesh

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    September 17, 2021 at 9:17 PM
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    Supermarkets are well capable of giving small local business a run for their money and many a times forcing them to close down. However the impact of this phenomenon on local communities, whether does this cause local communities to wither and die is debatable, with some prominent thinkers eviscerating policy makers lenient to supermarkets and others welcoming the changes that supermarket bring in to communities.

    The culture and vibe in local communities and the prominent business in the locality have a symbiotic relationship, they both thrive on each other. Local business contribute immensely to sustain the local communities, through being a main source of direct and indirect employment and being a cradle for development of community leaders. The unchecked growth of supermarket, which tend to be centrally governed and usually with no say and involvement of local community in its daily operation, can ring death knell to this relationship and wreak havoc. There are many well documented examples of this in USA, where especially in suburban areas, youth have either resorted to emigration or languishing in jobless resulting in death of local communities.

    However there is an other side of the coin too, supermarkets can give a much needed impetus to local business and thus local communities, as supermarkets need not compete with local business. Instead supermarket can turn local business in to feeders for the business, thus allowing the business pie to grow instead of splitting the pie. This is indeed the case in growth stories of supermarkets like Lulu, which is a hypermarket chain in India. This supermarket chain has become a hub for all local business to showcase and sell their wares and thus helped the local business and local community to prosper and thrive.

    In conclusion, I do not agree fully with the view that expansion of supermarkets can bring death knell to communities. if supermarkets grows establishing a symbiotic relationship with local business and local communities then all is well.

    • Abhinav

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      September 23, 2021 at 5:21 PM
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      The introduction does not contain your opinion. Even the last sentence of your introduction is grammatically incorrect. You missed out a few helping verbs and also the usage of word lenient is wrong.

      youth have either resorted to immigration or they are languishing in jobless situation.

      Rest of the writing is fine in terms of grammatical accuracy.

      Good use of vocabulary and grammatical range is also satisfactory.

      Band Score weightage: 4.5/6.0

  • hari

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    September 17, 2021 at 9:24 PM
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    Nowadays, supermarkets have mushroomed in majority of places languishing the street vendors. Automatically, local communities are unable to surmount the competition and dwindling. Let’s delve in order to predict the future of local communities.

    First and foremost, there has been an interdependent relation between local businesses and local consumers for ages. However, people have been forsaking them because of propensity towards grandeur of supermarkets. But, when we contemplate both the things from business perspective the commodities are similar and more often than not economical when compared to supermarkets. Besides, they provide better consumer requirement as they are adept at understanding us in a much better way.

    The other side of the the fact is that supermarkets are also crucial because we get expansive items under a single roof. They are working round the clock to provide this flexible service to the consumers. Thus saving our time and effort to buy products. For example, the acquisition of goods, availability of wide range of products like dry fruits to frozen food items. Furthermore, billing and parking are more systematic and consequently; less unpalatable.

    To conclude, we must support tenuous local communities in order not to exacerbate their current situation when we get same things in both places and maintain the timeless relationship. Nevertheless, we can visit supermarkets due to specific reasons like saving our time and efforts. We need to strike this fine balance, eventually both are businesses and need our support so as to have a win-win situation for all.

    • Abhinav

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      September 23, 2021 at 5:25 PM
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      Thesis statement is missing in introduction.

      Excellent structure. Task achievement is hundred percent. Good use of lexical resources. You have made a very good effort to make it grammatically accurate.

      The other side of the fact is that supermarkets are also crucial because we get expansive collection of items under a single roof.

      Band score weightage: 4.5/6.0

  • Janani

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    September 17, 2021 at 9:34 PM
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    Owing to the expansion of supermarkets in some countries, local business are unable to compete and therefore some people think that this will impact the economy of local business and thus bring about a death of the local communities. I agree with this arguement.

    Firstly, the development of such shops and outlets has definetly changed the buying experience for the customers, and major of the people get attracted towards these discounts, better price and quality. For example, star bazar, a well-known superstore in India present in many cities and towns, often offers weekly and monthly discounts on various products to their clients, eventually fortifying the customer base. With these all the above factors, these big shops have become one place for all the necessary purchase, and thus leading the customers with huge benefits suporting the development and change.

    On the other hand, the opening of supermarkets could benefit local manufacturers by sell their products on their premises. Although, in contrast to this every booming industry the small businesses suffer. Local vendors from the streets are unable to get a good amount of money for their goods. They have a very few repeated customers, but with very less need to purchase. Therefore, they are discouraged from selling their age-old recipes. For example, a community that sells meat lost its business to the big company of meat processor. The decline of business will eventually result in the extinction of the commodity altogether. If people do not purchase local recipes anymore, there is no use of preparing the dish. Hence, there has to be a constant balance between demand, and supply.

    To conclude, with the rapid expansion of stores in all places, local marketers are being exacerbated. In my opinion, the survival of local businesses is doubtful considering the above reasons. However, as these giant markets are here to stay for a long time it is imperative that small stores are given funds to sustain.

  • Maninder

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    October 4, 2021 at 7:48 PM
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    In the era of globalization, e-commerce marketplaces and supermarkets are popular amongst the new generation. Some people believe that due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small vendors will not be able to compete and the same would result in the closure of local businesses. In the succeeding paragraphs, we have discussed why new generations are attracted to supermarkets.

    One of the most important reason for shifting the trend of purchasing from local business to marketplace is the availability of all the items under one roof. People can buy grocery, electronics, clothes, and other essential needs from the supermarkets. For Eg., Big Bazaar a retail chain store in India sell all the items whether its related to the house or sports, or wedding in their stores, which would safe lots of time and effort for the buyer.

    Another reason for choosing marketplaces is that goods are available at huge discounts in comparison to the small vendor’s shops. Along with the cheaper price, supermarkets offers the branded product with longer durability. For Eg. In the festive season, all the supermarkets offer discounts upto-50% of the product. People can save huge money while shopping from chain stores and can invest the money saved for alternative use.

    Basis the aforesaid discussion, I strongly believe that development and expansion of marketplaces are good for buyers, however the same has a detrimental impact on the small vendors.

  • Sheeba

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    October 5, 2021 at 11:49 AM
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    As there is a rapid development of supermarket in some countries, many small business and local business are not able to compete the corporate. Some people think that the end of such local business will make the local communities to extinct. In this essay let us see both the views.

    To begin with, the idea of the growth of the supermarket is enormous. It affects the local business. Let us see what are all the reason for the extinct of small business. People link their financial status with supermarkets. Also they believe that the quality of the product is better than local shops. All the products are available in supermarket but in local shops all the products are not available. People are more obsessed towards the brand. Even though there is no need to buy products, architecture of each supermarket grabs the customer to get inside and makes people to purchase. Attractive discounts plays a vital role to increase their customer. So the local business and small business does not have good architecture to impress their customer. They have space constraints so it is impossible to sell all the products in a small shop.

    In addition to it, certain people show interest to local business and small business. If the quality of the product is good, then they will be having their own regular customers. As small shops are budget friendly, some people will not get their products from supermarket. In supermarket, in the billing counter there will be long queue. Some people will purchase in local shops to reduce their time. So we cannot say in general that supermarkets wipe the opportunity of local business.

    In conclusion, the more they have reputation, the greater the crowd will be. Will the brand helps to increase the customer? In the long run, the brand will not make more customers but the quality of the product does.

  • Tanya

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    September 10, 2021 at 11:23 PM
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    We are talking about shops(plural) and hence should be provide(singular).

  • Mohit

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    September 17, 2021 at 9:15 PM
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    okay thank you Sir,

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