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Some people think that teenagers should concentrate on all subjects at school. Others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject they are best at or they are most interested in. To what extent do you agree?
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Some people believe that adolescent children should give attention to all subjects at school. Whereas others are of the opinion that most of these children should give their attention to subjects they are good at and most interested in. I agree with the former as if children are not taught all subjects, they would not know which subjects they would enjoy and decide to later pursue on.
By learning all subjects, the teenagers will get a big picture overview of all the core subjects. Had they not been introduced to these stem subjects earlier on, they would not have an idea of topics that would later be interested in. Teenagers are in a growing stage, and everything is new to them. They can grasp knowledge more quickly, and it is the right age for them to learn such subjects. In order for them to adapt and learn about the world, they need to be formally taught all the basic theories about the main subjects. This will help them gain an overall picture and generate interest where they can choose a relevant field for them to specialize in.
The knowledge they gained in schools about all subjects will help them in their careers and daily lives. Like for instance in jobs where they will work and mingle alongside engineers, accountants, medical doctors. Having the basic idea of all the subjects will help them make better decisions in their day-to-day lives. The everyday knowledge which we take for granted is got from these elementary subjects that are taught in schools. Basic knowledge must be taught in schools for this reason as it helps people converse and mingle with everyone in society.
To conclude, by teaching all subjects in schools the teenagers will get an idea what to pursue in his career and also will help in his work and daily life where he has to interact will all walks of the society.
AdministratorSeptember 20, 2021 at 12:14 PM140 Network PointsActivity Points 14890
INTRODUCTION: Whereas- don’t start your sentence with whereas as it’s a continuation of your previous sentence. Include it with the previous sentence
BP 1: big picture overview- write either big picture or overview
that would later- that they would later
BP 2: is got- is obtained
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MemberSeptember 14, 2021 at 12:43 PM130 Network PointsActivity Points 810
Adolescents should pay more attention towards the subjects in which they have more interest, this is thought process of few people whereas few still believe that they should pay equal attention to all the subjects during school days. I also believe that the school going children must pay equal attention to all the subjects in place of focusing only on few subjects.
School’s education builds a strong base for the children. It is children’s responsibility to focus on each and every subject which will help them in future. Strong base will help kids in making a better future decisions as to in which subject they are good or which one they do not have interest.
I have seen some children who initially do not like science or mathematics because they have a fear as it is considered as on of the toughest subjects but once they start focusing on basic formulas and they learn basic concepts thoroughly than gradually they start liking these subjects and find it easy also they might make a career in the same field.
If they will not give to those subjects which they do not have much of interest than without giving time they will not know and they will not be bale to explore themselves in that specific subject which might be very interesting for them in future. Even though if they do not proceed with few of the subjects they never liked or they could not understand well but if they know the basics than as it is said knowledge never gets wasted and it may help in future. This will also give a confidence also in future to face any situation well in future if it is related to those topics or subjects they did not like but they know well what was it about.
I would like to conclude here as focusing only to those subjects you like may not be good for your children’s future while paying equal attention to each subjects will help them to increase the knowledge repository which will help them in future.
AdministratorSeptember 20, 2021 at 12:18 PM140 Network PointsActivity Points 14890
INTRODUCTION: This is thought process: this is the thought process
BP 1: making a better- taking better
BP 2: don’t give personal observation
than gradually- then gradually
BP 3: If they will….- make it short and precise
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MemberSeptember 14, 2021 at 1:42 PM20 Network PointsActivity Points 910
Some people affirm that school going children should concentrate on all the academic subjects during their school times, while others argue that children should solely focus on the subjects they are keen on pursuing in the future. In my opinion, I am convinced that students must be more inclined towards enhancing their skills in subjects which interests them the most but I also agree to the fact that knowledge to all the subjects is crucial.
To start with, exposure and learning of all the core subjects at school is vital for the growth of a child. Unless a child is made aware to the basic topics which have a greater practical application later in life, there will be a huge gap in the learning curve of the child. Additionally, in the growing stage of their lives they must be exposed to all the aspects of life before they decide to choose one stream. If the child is not given an overall picture of the basic subjects how would they make a decision of what is better for them?
On the contrary, for the believers of focused training at school, children must concentrate on the subjects they want to pursue later in life. Once a child identifies his interest, he must be given a platform to enhance his skills in that field of interest only. The schools can play a great role in shaping the career of its students if they begin to start training students for the entrance exams of the specialised courses. The subject specific training can boost the skills and enhance the productivity of students in their majors. For instance, it is believed that youngsters who start preparing for the entrance exams of engineering after their 10th grade perform way better at exams than those who start coaching late.
In conclusion, I would concede that interest based trainings are crucial to prepare a child for his future. Despite this, teaching all the subjects is important to give students a fair idea of what interests them the most.
AdministratorSeptember 20, 2021 at 12:20 PM140 Network PointsActivity Points 14890
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AdministratorSeptember 16, 2021 at 12:52 PM140 Network PointsActivity Points 14890
Introduction- people, Attention- people, attention
Which they are the most…- paraphrase clearly
BP1: the knowledge- knowledge
them broadening- them in broadening
wants to- want to
prerequisites training- prerequisites of training
BP 2: leads- lead
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MemberSeptember 17, 2021 at 5:36 PM120 Network PointsActivity Points 580
Some people think that attention should be paid to all the subjects by the adolescents at school whereas some believe that the children should only focus on the subjects that they like the most. According to me, all the subjects are important in a student’s life. The subjects which are taught in the school form a foundation for the carrer of the student and that’s why it is important to pay equal attention to all the subjects.
People often advice the students to solely focus on the subjects that they like but the introduction to each and every subject at the school level is a basic requirement that a student should get, this will not only help the students to choose their subject wisely in future but also help them to explore the wide variety of carrer options that comes with the subject that they study.
It is necessary to study several subjects at once to have a complete study formation. Education programs are carefully chosen and selected for a reason, which means that every single subject is important and relevant in the student’s life. For instance if a student decides to study and be committed only to economics, but not maths, there will be a point where in order to solve statistics questions, basic maths will also be needed. Therefore, the student will lack in this aspect and this will create a problem for the student to cope up with the subject.
In conclusion, paying attention to only the subjects that students find interesting might be convenient to some extent but in my opinion, it will be beneficial if they try to focus on all the school subjects that are being taught as it might provide them with an integral formation that will help them in future.
AdministratorSeptember 20, 2021 at 8:46 AM140 Network PointsActivity Points 14890
INTRODUCTION: in the school- at school
write main points in your thesis statement
BP 2: the student’s life- a student’s life
write more diverse ideas
BAND SCORE: 3/6 Keep Writing!