[Lakshya]

These days, it is considered that for learning foreign languages childhood is the best while
some argue that adults are having more potential to learn foreign languages. This essay is going to
discuss the both views.

To begin with, many individuals find that young mind grabs new information easily. Many researches has also said, children have sharp mind as compared to adults. It has seen children are more keened to learn new things and they do not have any hesitation while speaking wrong in front of people. For instance, nowadays, children are using features of gadgets simultaneously with their parents so it can be said that they will not find it difficult to learn two languages at the same time.

On the other hand, it has been considered by many people that learning is lifetime process and adults are having more maturity in order to learn new languages. Furthermore, they are minds are developed and they can be more suitable. Moreover, companies are also asking their employees to become more proficient in another languages for connecting with clients across the globe.

To conclude, a large number of group consider the childhood to be the best age for learning languages. Whereas, other find that adulthood is best age for learning foreign languages. I personally believe that adulthood is most appropriate age to learn foreign languages as they already have good exposure to working with people and know diversity in world.

-Grammatical errors, for say- researches (it should be researchers)

-Good use of connectors

Overall-5/6.

[Lakshya]

This bar graph illustrates the weekly time spent on various activities by youngsters during 2002 to 2007 in Chester.

Overall, it is clear from the given graph that going to pubs, watching television and shopping showed
an upward trend while doing homework, doing sport and bowling experienced a downward trend. Watching DVDs had fluctuations throughout the period.

In early years 2002 and 2003, time spent on going to pubs/discos were around around 7 & 10 hours respectively. After that from year 2004 to 2006 it remained constant around 12 hours. At the end of the period it was on peak around around 18 hours. Time spent on watching television has been always on top among all other activities. In year 2002, time spent on shopping was around 7 hours and there has been a significant increase over the period till the end.

It has seen that gradual decrease in doing homework and doing sport, in year 2002 it was around 12 hours and 10 hours whereas in the end it was around 7 hours and 2 hours respectively. Watching DVDs has fluctuations all over the period. Teenager have not spent much time on bowling during this period which started from 4 hours and ended up with 1 hour.

-Grammatical errors

-Wide range of sentences

Overall-2.5/3.