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ACADEMIC WRITINK TASK 1: DIAGRAM- LIFE CYCLE
The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Introduction- paraphrase clearly
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Band Score: 1.5/3 Keep Writing!
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The diagrams represents the life-cycle of a certain breed of large fish known as Salmon.
The life of a Salmon fish begins in the upper part of the river where the water is calm. The adult fish lay their in-between the small stones present near the reeds. The eggs begin to hatch and the baby fishes come to life. These young fishes feed on reeds and grow up to 3 to 8 cm’s in length and are known as ‘fry’.
The fishes then move to the lower part of the river where the currents move faster. They live here for about 4 years and grow up to be known as ‘smolt’. At this stage they are 12 to 15 cm’s in length and live in this region for about 4 years.
After spending a part of their life in the river the smolts move into the open sea. Here the smolts live for nearly 5 years and grow into adults. The average length of these adults are 70 to 76 cm’s. These adults then go back to their birth place for reproduction.
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The diagram represents the life-cycle of a certain breed of large fish known as the ‘Salmon’
The life of a Salmon fish begins in the upper part of the river where the river is calm. the adult fish lay their eggs between the small stones present near the reeds. The eggs begin to hatch and the baby fishes come to life. These young fishes feed on reeds and spend about 5 to 6 months in this part of the river and grow up to 3 to 8 cm’s in length and are known as ‘fry’.
The fishes then move to the lower region of the river where the currents move faster. They grow up to 12 to 15 cm’s length. At this stage they are known as ‘smolt’ and live here for about 4 years.
After spending a part of their life in the river, they move in to the open sea. They Live here for 5 years and grow into adults. The average length of these adults are 70 to 76 cm’s . Once they reach their reproductive phase they go back to their birth place to lay eggs.
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INTRODUCTION: certain breed- not required
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BAND SCORE: 1.5/3 Stick to the format. Keep Writing!
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The given diagrams explain the life cycle and respective sizes of a large fish species called the Salmon. The given diagrams explain the life cycle and respective sizes of a large fish species called the Salmon.
Overall, it shows the salmon develops in three major stages from a Fry to an adult Salmon. At each stage, the size of the fish and their habitats change.Overall, it shows the salmon develops in three major stages from a Fry to an adult Salmon. At each stage, the size of the fish and their habitats change.
Salmon eggs are laid in the upper river, which is slow-moving, among small stones and reeds. After 5 to 6 months, they are hatched into the first stage of Salmon fish ‘Fry’. It is around 3 to 8 cm in length. They migrate to the fast-moving lower river. In about four years, they develop into the next stage called smolt, which then migrate to the sea.Salmon eggs are laid in the upper river, which is slow-moving, among small stones and reeds. After 5 to 6 months, they are hatched into the first stage of Salmon fish ‘Fry’. It is around 3 to 8 cm in length. They migrate to the fast-moving lower river. In about four years, they develop into the next stage called smolt, which then migrate to the sea.
The smolt, which is 12 to 15 cm in length, matures into an adult Salmon of 70 to 76 cm in almost five years. Then adult salmon travels back to the upper river to lay eggs.The smolt, which is 12 to 15 cm in length, matures into an adult Salmon of 70 to 76 cm in almost five years. Then adult salmon travels back to the upper river to lay eggs.
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Feedback : Very well written. Keep it up
Band : 2.5/3
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Hello @falak Ma’am. Please do give your valuable feedback.
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Feedback :
species known as salmon (Salmon)- Proper noun.
to (an) adult Salmon
They then migrates (migrate)
Always proof read , in order to avoid silly mistakes; otherwise well-explained.
Band : 2/3
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The diagrams explain the life cycle of specific specie of fish known as Salmon.
Overall, it shows that salmon develops in three different stages from a fry to and adult salmon. At the same time, the size of salmon also changes in every stage.
In the first step, eggs of salmon are laid in upper slowing river along with small stones and reeds. Eventually, after 5-6 months, they evolve into fry. Generally, fry is around 3-8 cm in length. In the next step, they migrate to lower fast flowing river. In about 4 years they enlarge as a Molt.
Furthermore, the molt which is approximately 12-15 cm in size relocate to open sea and mature as an adult Salmon in around 5 years. The size of a mature salmon is around 70-76 cm. At last, adult and fully grown up salmon travels back to upper slowing river for laying eggs.
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@fal ma’am kindly assess my work
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@fal ma’am please assess my work
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