[sheena]

In recent times, many people expect that the financial liabilities should be handled by both partners in a marriage. Personally, I disagree with this notion as it may not be practical and will have adverse impact on the family. This essay will discuss benefits and drawback of such an idea and explain the necessity of dividing the roles in a family.

Undoubtedly, there are many advantages in sharing the financial responsibility in a household as a double income makes one’s life easier compared to a single income. Issues due to high cost of living, other economic crisis and struggle to meet basic needs of the family are mitigated, if both people are working. For Instance, there are cities like Tokyo, where people do not prefer to have babies due to high cost of living and double income can solve this issue to some extent.

In contrast, multiple things in a house are getting neglected when both partners are busy in making a better living. Inculcating good habits and values and physical and mental health of the members are often disregarded in such situations. For example, many incidents are reported about how infants are treated badly by nannies in the absence of their parents. Hence it is necessary to divide roles in a family as per people’s abilities and take care of aspects other than wealth and balance the whole ecosystem for an overall well-being of the household.

In conclusion, although it is good to get additional
income for the financial stability, it creates multiple issues due to the less
time individuals spent with their kids and spouses. Therefore, I oppose the
idea of focusing only on the money instead of looking after all aspects for a better
living

[isha]

In recent times, many people expect that the financial liabilities should be handled by both partners in a marriage. Personally, I disagree with this notion as it may not be practical and will have an adverse impact on the family. This essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of such an idea and explain the necessity of dividing the roles in a family.

Undoubtedly, there are many advantages in sharing the financial responsibility in a household as a double income makes one’s life easier compared to a single income. Issues due to high cost of living, other economic crisis and struggle to meet basic needs of the family are mitigated, if both people are working. For Instance, there are cities like Tokyo, where people do not prefer to have babies due to high cost of living and double income can solve this issue to some extent.

In contrast, multiple things in a house get neglected when both partners are busy making a better living. Inculcating good habits and values and physical and mental health of the members are often disregarded in such situations. For example, many incidents are reported about how infants are treated badly by nannies in the absence of their parents. Hence, it is necessary to divide roles in a family as per people’s abilities and take care of aspects other than wealth and balance the whole ecosystem for the overall well-being of the household.

In conclusion, although it is good to get additional

income for financial stability, it creates multiple issues due to the less

time spent by parents with their kids and spouses.

Feedback:

Nice attempt. You have made your stand clear in the intro and concluding paragraph.

BP 2 ,here you can elaborate it little bit more with relevant data.

Bands – 4/6

[Shibin Siby]

The financial requirements for maintaining a family has changed quite a lot compared to the past. The notion of keeping a single bread winner in a house has major drawbacks for maintaining a positive cash flow into the family reserve. This essay highlights why modern family structure demands both family members to contribute to the financial resource pool for sustaining a family in a financially stable situation.

Firstly, compared to past financial requirement for running a family has increased due to several factors including inflation. An argument can be made that for providing the best chance for children to stay competitive in rough and changing trends that is happening right now needs a huge money pool, therefore by cutting of one asset source it would be harder on the person that is designated as bread winner. This debunks what is generally said that your offspring’s welfare is at risk if both parents are working.

Secondly an argument can be made, that income from both the partners might help to keep the family dynamic stable where there is less chance for one dominating the other. This will set an example for stepping away from a society that is criticized of being male dominated which could help to normalize equality for both genders.

From the ideas presented we can summarized that it takes two to build a family and in this case a greater involvement of both male and female spouses to share all the responsibilities of running a family. It might not be the strategy that might work for everybody but still this approach significantly reduce the probability of collapse in absence of one of the family member who contribute to the resource pool that runs a family.

[isha]

The financial requirements for maintaining a family have changed quite a lot compared to the past. The notion of keeping a single bread winner in a house has major drawbacks for maintaining a positive cash flow in the family reserve. This essay explains why a modern family structure requires both family members to contribute to the financial resource pool in order to keep a family financially stable.

Firstly, compared to the past, financial requirements for running a family have increased due to several factors, including inflation. An argument can be made that for providing the best chance for children to stay competitive in the rough and changing trends that are happening right now, they need a huge money pool. Therefore, by cutting off one asset source, it would be harder on the person that is designated as the bread winner. This debunks what is generally said that your offspring’s welfare is at risk if both parents are working.

Secondly, an argument can be made, that income from both the partners might help to keep the family dynamic stable where there is less chance of one dominating the other. This will set an example for stepping away from a society that is criticized for being male-dominated, which could help to normalize equality for both genders.

From the ideas presented, we can summarize that it takes two to build a family, and in this case, a greater involvement of both male and female spouses to share all the responsibilities of running a family. It might not be the strategy that might work for everybody, but still, this approach significantly reduce the probability of collapse in the absence of one of the family members who contributes to the resource pool that runs a family.

Coherent and structured properly.

Repetition of words like : financial requirements, maintaining ,family, bread winner, resource pool.

Grammatical errors.

Bands – 4/6