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Task 2 (discuss both views)- Protecting environment
Some people say that protecting the environment is the government’s responsibility. Others believe that every individual should be responsible for it.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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It is argued by some that it is the government’s responsibility to save the environment. however, other people say that it is responsible for individuals as well. In my opinion, protecting the environment is the responsibility of both the government and every individual. This essay will discuss both views in the following paragraphs.
Government should make strict regulations for the industries which produce more harmful gases. The reason is those gases which are released from different factories might be detrimental for human health. For example, one research was conducted in Pakistan clearly showed that people who reside near to the chemical industries 60 percentage more likely to get several diseases. Therefore, the government should make such policy so that such type of factories are established far away from the residential area with new technology which releases less gas.
Every individual should be responsible for saving the environment and it can be done by using less fossil fuel. That is to say, people should start using public transport more often instead of taking car even for short distances. By this way they can help to release less carbon footprint which is really detrimental for the environment. For instance, In Japan, bicycles are mandatory to use 2 days everyweek for every individual. As a result, pollution is decreased tremendously.
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Feedback : Make use of transition words to establish logical sequence throughout the paragraph.
Try to use punctuations for better understanding
Topic sentences of each body paragraph could have been more effective
other people say that it is responsible for individuals as well (individuals are responsible as well)
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In conclusion, in my opinion, both government and public should work together to save the environment by making stringent policy and using less fossils fuel. This will definitely help to protect the environment.
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Human intervention is certainly degrading the enviornment. Some people feel that the government bodies should be responsible to save our enviornment while others feel that people individually must take the responsibility of protecting it. In this essay both sides of the argument will be discussed including my opinion to why it is important for both to protect the enviornment.
On one hand it is believed that only way to protect our nature is with the help of the government. Untill and unless some strict laws are made by the authority humans are going to destroy the enviornment. First of all, a rule has to be made for the industries to not dump the waste directly into the water bodies and polluting gases in the open air. Secondly travelling by various non polluting vehicle must be encouraged by the government. For example , people must be awared about the various electric vehicles as this would affect the nature way less when compared to traditional vehicles. But will it be enough if the authority makes these laws? Let’s find out in the next passage.
On the other hand some feel that if people individually do not understand the significance of protecting our enviornment nothing can be done. Humans must realise that throwing various wastes especially plastics hamper our ecosystem immensely. For travelling close by instead of using our cars and bikes walking or cycling must be preffered.For instance, In Canada most of the families have a car or a bike but when they go to work they go by either a cycle or by walking which decreases the pollution caused. Also,people must try to plant as many trees as they can as this will be extremely useful for the ecosystem.
In conclusion, I feel that neither Government nor people individually alone can protect the enviornment rather together with Strict government laws and self realisation among people will be much more useful to save the ecosystem.
Hello @falak Ma’am. Please do give your valuable feedback
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On one hand(,)
Untill (Until) and unless some strict laws are made by the authority (,)humans are going to destroy the enviornment (environment)
Secondly (,) travelling by various non polluting vehicle(s)
Let’s find out in the next passage.(too casual); rather you can go for (This notion is yet to be considered under certain conditions)
Use punctuations to make writing more effective.
Otherwise, well -written and supported with examples. Keep writing!
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Many people debate on whether the government bodies or an individual be withholding the responsibility to protect nature. I strongly believe that every individual in society should be respectful and preserve the resources in order to protect the nature as government solely cannot implement the change.
The administration should be responsible to pass the rules to safeguard the nature habitat. Government leaders should allow citizens to enroll in the schemes to plant 10,000 trees per year. For example, in 2006, in the New Zealand survey, they have implemented a similar program to reduce pollution and protect the ecosystem and within 2 years of continuous effort, they have seen a 10% of reduction of air pollution in their environment. In addition to that, the ministry of environmental sciences and pollution control board by enforcing all the vehicles to pass the pollution control check every year that checks the emission of carbon monoxide gas emission from automobiles.
Every individual in society owes to mother nature by being responsible for the usage of natural resources. There are various methods to support the government in protecting the atmosphere by not cutting down trees for personal and commercial usages and planting trees in their home and community surroundings. Protection of the environment cannot be implemented solely by the rulers there is also equal responsibility on every person. Everyone has to follow the necessary pollution checks as enforced by the government parties and play their responsible part to the society.
To conclude, I believe every individual has to support government administration to safeguard nature and also play the responsible citizen role in order to protect their surroundings.
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Feedback : Inculcate the usage of cohesive devices. Example in body paragraph 2 , would be appreciated.
nature habitat (natural habitat)
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The environment has been deteriorating due to the negligence of mankind. While some argue that the onus lies on government, others believe that it can be only protected when each individual feels it as a moral responsibility. This essay will argue both views in depth and finally share the logical opinion.
On one hand, Government has the obligation to protect the environment since it has specific departments allocated to safeguard various realms of the environment. A good illustration of this is: Municipal department has the right to demolish buildings if the buildings were to be constructed by encroaching ponds and forestry. However, if the government abandons their moral duty, the common people have a lesser role to play to safeguard the environment. Therefore, the government should ensure strict implementation of guidelines in place.
On the other hand, even if the government were to take a plethora of measures to protect nature, it cannot be maintained in the long run to the negligence of human activities. For instance, despite having waste garbage bins in the vicinity of restaurants, hardly do people throw refuse in them. As a result, the waste goes into the landfill and has detrimental effects for generations to come. Thus, the prevention of destructive measures by every individual is the first step to saving our mother nature.
Taking both views into consideration, although it is the governments’ duty to protect mother nature, protecting the environment can only be achieved when each individual can act diligently. Therefore, the initiation from the public would only be a preferred alternative.
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There are different perspectives that some people thinks government should be responsible about the environment, while other people think that citizens should also be concerned about the environment. I will support both the statements in the essay.
Firstly, government should be accountable for implementing the laws and punishing people who are not obeying the laws regarding protection of environment. Government bodies should regulate and keep checking the industries and power plants for proper dumping of chemical compounds, industrial and radioactive waste after treating them and then releasing it in water bodies, so it won’t harm the aquatic environment, collecting garbage different for biodegradable and non-biodegradable waste, and recycling the waste. For example, government in India has started “Swach bharat abhiyan” for keeping environment clean.
Secondly, people should also be concerned about the environment; they should educate their children about conserving nature, so that we have a better environment for future generations. Citizens should use more public transport, instead of using cars and bikes to stop the harmful gases affecting nature, using dustbin rather than throwing garbage in the locality, reducing the use of plastics in everyday use and to go green using only things which can be decomposed. For example- people of Japan organises many events of cleaning the rivers and the neighborhood.
In conclusion, I would say that it’s not just responsibility of either government or an individual, with the effort of everyone, we could save the earth from these hazardous chemicals compounds and toxic gases which is degrading natural habitat.
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There are different perspectives (It is argued by some ….) –
people thinks (think)
I will support both the statements in the essay. (your opinion as demanded in question needs to be mentioned in introduction)
collecting garbage different for biodegradable and non-biodegradable waste, and recycling the waste- sentence seems to be incomplete as cohesion has not been established clearly.
bikes to stop the (emission of) harmful gases
certainly, great improvement can be observed. Keep writing!!!
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Hi,
Please review the essay below :
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some laws should be introduced to control the emission (only laws by governing authorities can control the emission)- we need to follow the idea why govt. should be responsible
example in B.P 2, says about efforts by municipal corporation ( government) ; manage the same example as step by public
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Some people argue that it is every citizen’s responsibility to protect our environment, while others say it is the government’s call to take necessary actions. While the rules and regulations implemented by the authorities are important for the preservation of nature, I believe if every human being comes together in this great cause then it is easily achievable.
On the one hand, imposing strict laws by the ministry to conserve our habitat is significant because they are the leaders of the nation and that’s why it is their foremost responsibility to take actions by imposing fines for the ones who are destroying our environment, making special communities who will take care of nature. For instance, whenever in my locality if someone tries to cut trees for building houses these groups show up and charge them heavy duties.
On the other hand, a considerable amount of people believe every individual should oversee their surroundings and take charge of that. This definitely makes the task more achievable as when people unite and take care of their mother nature together then it can easily safeguard our territory. For this, they can plant more trees around their homes, and also make the place neat and clean or the minimum they can do is to just stand by the law. For example, as a responsible person living on this planet, I have installed solar panels on my rooftop.
To conclude, Although everyone including the law makers as well as common people all are equally answerable for environmental conditions in the society, but I believe as a responsible resident of this universe it is our duty to look after our nature.
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making special communities who will take care of nature. (to establish special communities for the better enforcement of law)
I felt example in second body paragraph could be more elaborated , may be a sentence or two, explaining how solar panel is saving the nature.
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Humankind has always been concerned about protecting and preserving the environment. As the world is advancing with time, there has been ongoing debate between people that protecting the environment is the responsibility of government bodies while others believe that it’s the responsibility of the individuals. In this essay both sides of the argument will be discussed including my opinion as to why it is essential for both to protect the environment.
Firstly, I believe government plays a primary role in protecting the environment because it act as the leader of the country, who can make policy to protect the environment while creating awareness programmes in the society. But it can only be done when there is strict implementation of laws like controlling the activities of industrialists who produces harmful gases, planting more trees, reducing risk of pollution emitted through commercial activities. For example, New Delhi has always been counted as the major polluted city in India which is gradually degrading it’s environment but Chief Minister of Delhi, Mr.Arvind Kejriwal, took steps to curb this pollution like by adopting the odd-even method which helped in reducing Air quality index of Delhi, planting trees on public ways, etc., Therefore, it’s the government authorities only which can make a difference by following a strict action plan to improve the environment and implementing it.
On the other hand, as individuals or as a citizen of the country, it is our fundamental duty to protect our environment. As an individual can only improve the environment and balance the natural habitat. This could be done by creating awareness among people, planting trees, more usage of renewable energy and less usage of fossil fuel etc., for example people should use more of a public vehicles than their personal vehicles for shorter distances and it will help us in reduction of carbon emission. These are some ways individual must follow to protect the environment and save us from environment degradation.
By concluding it, I would say both are equally responsible for the protection of an environment and everybody must work, be it government or an individual because together only we can keep the environment in their natural habitat and save our ecosystem.
Ma’am give your valuable feedback.
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controlling the activities of industrialists who (which) produces harmful gases,
Task is well-written. Keep it up!!
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Most people would believe that preserving the environment is liable to the government but they are by no means only their responsibility, as we shall see.
Admittedly, Government plays a key role in safeguarding the environment and working on measures to secure it for future generations. However, they should introduce more legislations to mitigate the alarming issues such as air pollution, water pollution etc. To illustrate, there should be some laws which encourages big manufacturers to move from urban areas to villages thereby reducing the fumes produced by them. Furthermore , with the help of technology, government can encourage citizens to recycle the plastic waste which saves the environment from plastic disposal everywhere mainly from waterbodies. For example , Germany has introduced a new method of recycling where if a person disposes five plastic bottles inside a machine, it gives a one pound for free. Now that’s innovative and fun for folks to do as they are also earning through the process and they get a sense of benevolence.
On the other hand, People should also take equal responsibility in caring for the nature as the world is not made by one. One of the vital problems faced in our surroundings is air pollution which is mainly caused by vehicle emission. People should consider using personal vehicles in rare cases thereby reducing the harmful cases emitted. Cars are major sources of two kinds of pollution such as air and noise pollution. Another opportunity for people to take part in protecting the environment is by low consumption of plastic materials. They can opt for not purchasing things made out of, or packaged using plastics. In addition to this, they can use their own recyclable cloth bags and thereby reducing the production of plastics covers.
As saving an environment is a big phenomena and it involves a lot of work, mobilizing all possible forces is the only way. To conclude, every individual and government should work together to protect the environment.
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Introduction seems incomplete, as it lacks thesis statement ; your stand is not clear.
However, (Therefore,) they should introduce more legislations –
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Most people think governments could be held accountable for safeguarding environment. some people argue that every individual should be liable for it. While governments can encourage factories to shift to countryside. I believe that people should limit themselves from fossil fuel driven vehicles. In my opinion, this is a sensitive issue which should be dealt by both individuals and governments as it is deteriorating every day.
On one hand, government plays pivotal role in maintaining environment safe and healthy. It is authorities should make legislation to mitigate environment problems like air pollution and water pollution. To illustrate, there should be laws to encourage companies to move to the village side rather than staying in cities. Due to which people who live in urban areas can minimize the environmental hazardous substances from factories. Additionally, government should create awareness campaigns and educate people regarding adverse effects humans are posing on environment.
On the other hand, it is undeniable fact that each person plays important role on environment. Cars are considered to be major source of air pollution. They emit carbon di-oxide from their exhaust when fuel is burnt. Therefore, using private cars in rare cases can able to protect environment. Nevertheless, public transport should be made more convenient and reliable. While giving incentives for green energy automobiles by authorities can open door to electric vehicles. For instance, Delhi government motivated its public to move towards clean energy driven cars by giving allowances, subsequently few states followed same initiative.
To conclude, humans are heavily reliance on fossil fuel energy. However, administration should consider alternatives for clean energy and inspire people to move towards zero emission.
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Most people think governments could be held accountable for safeguarding environment. (while some argue) some people argue that every individual should be liable for it.
While governments can encourage factories to shift to countryside. (,) I believe that people should limit themselves from fossil fuel driven vehicles.
In my opinion, this is a sensitive issue (as it is deteriorating every day.) which should (and needs to ) be dealt by both individuals and governments (collectively) (as it is deteriorating every day.- remove it)
It is (the) authorities (which) should make legislation to mitigate
each person plays (an) important role on (in protecting the) environment
humans are heavily (have) reliance on fossil fuel energy
Try to avoid making short sentences
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In a modern society, environmental care has become the centre of global debates. Some people think that only government is responsible for protecting the environment,while others believe that every human being must be liable for it.In my opinion, it will be more beneficial if both the country and individuals share the responsibility equally.
Firstly,the government plays a important role in maintaining the environment safe and healthy.The Country’s Authorities should introduce some laws encouraging factories to move from Cities to the countrysides, so that the rate of air pollution is reduced.On the other hand,it is undeniable that each person should step forward for Go-GREEN surroundings rather than polluting the area by using plastics and throwing them on the roadsides. Everyone should promote recycling of waste materials to maintain a healthy environment.As per the “Swachh Bharat Abhiyan” program introduced in India by Prime Minister Narendra Modi, all the plastic items were stopped for usage. It was observed, that by stopping plastic waste from entering and contaminating water outlets people are able to save drinking water and the natural habitat.
Secondly,the political departments should come up with some new ideas to educate citizens, and to encourage them to care the nature more.Also educated individuals should provide awareness to their neighbourhood about the pros and cons of a healthy environment.For example,in many rural parts of India, “Street plays” are conducted by several Welfare Organisations where in a group of people act in a show based on ongoing problems on streets which conveys a strong message at the end of the play.such activities are more easy to educate people about the important of protecting the nature.
In conclusion the government should use their power for safety of Mother Earth by bringing new rules which every individual should follow.Thus, the joint efforts of both the government and their citizens would result in the most effective way of preserving the environment.
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,the government plays a (an) important role in maintaining (keeping) the environment safe and healthy.
stopping plastic waste from entering and contaminating water outlets (bodies) people are able to save drinking water and the natural habitat (for aquatic life)
such activities are more easy to educate people about the important (importance) of protecting the nature.
In conclusion(,) the government should
paraphrasing could be done effectively , avoid copying language from question
paragraphing has not been done as required , 2 views are presented in one paragraph; not advised.
second body paragraph seems to be distorted as it is the off-topic.
sentence range needs to be considered.
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It is considered by some individuals that solving environmental problems is the duty of the governments, while there are people who have an opinion that it is the duty of every single individual to protect their surroundings. this essay will discuss both the views and I believe that government intervention is must in some areas but i also believe that individuals can also lead the way.
there are many reason why some individulas say that it is the duty of of the goverment as in developing and under developed countries where literacy rate is not very high and indviduals are not very much concerned about environment, the governments should enacts strict laws for the betterment and protection of environment. for example, in some states of India single use plastic is banned, but people are still using them beacuse the laws are not so strict. Secondly, Big Industrial units in Cities pollute the air by blowing toxic metals and smoke out through vents and chimneys and by burning chemical waste. factories sometimes dump dirty water, used chemicals and oil waste directly into the common water source such as lake or river, all these activities can only be stopped by the intervention of government and local authorities.
On the other hand, it is undeniable that each individual may have a important contribution to protect there surroundings and neighbourhood.
For instance, if the government of a country takes initiatives to reduce the garbage produced daily, it will not be so effective . However, if the individuals take effort at personal level, garbage production could be controlled at a much higher rate Similarly, if the administration of a country starts planting trees, the effort would not go at a large scale without the collaboration and contributions of the individuals. I believe every small action taken by individuals can prove to be very effective.It is considered by some individuals that solving environmental problems is the duty of the governments, while there are people who have an opinion that it is the duty of every single individual to protect their surroundings. this essay will discuss both the views and I believe that government intervention is must in some areas but i also believe that individuals can also lead the way.
there are many reason why some individulas say that it is the duty of of the goverment as in developing and under developed countries where literacy rate is not very high and indviduals are not very much concerned about environment, the governments should enacts strict laws for the betterment and protection of environment. for example, in some states of India single use plastic is banned, but people are still using them beacuse the laws are not so strict. Secondly, Big Industrial units in Cities pollute the air by blowing toxic metals and smoke out through vents and chimneys and by burning chemical waste. factories sometimes dump dirty water, used chemicals and oil waste directly into the common water source such as lake or river, all these activities can only be stopped by the intervention of government and local authorities.
On the other hand, it is undeniable that each individual may have a important contribution to protect there surroundings and neighbourhood.
For instance, if the government of a country takes initiatives to reduce the garbage produced daily, it will not be so effective . However, if the individuals take effort at personal level, garbage production could be controlled at a much higher rate Similarly, if the administration of a country starts planting trees, the effort would not go at a large scale without the collaboration and contributions of the individuals. I believe every small action taken by individuals can prove to be very effective.
In conclusion, I believe that a combined approach will work best to prevent and protect environment. A contribution of every individual is just as important as the intervention from the government in order to fix existing issues and save our planet for future generations.
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“I” needs to be capital throughout
“duty” , “individuals” – repeatedly used
there are many reason(s)
there are many reason why some individulas (individuals) say that it is the duty of of the goverment (government) – avoid copying language from the question
the governments should enacts (enact)
factories sometimes dump (release) dirty water,
common water source(s)
contribution to protect there (their) surroundings and neighbourhood.
h individual may have a (an) important
if (only) the government
feedback : Make use of cohesive devices, sentence structure needs to be improved. Grammatical errors are there. Punctuation is important.
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In today’s world, Save the ecosystem has become a biggest challenge for the human being, because it impacts each soul on the earth. Some people argue that securing the nature is a duty of ministry while others say that each person has a liability to protect the territory. I reckon, it is authority of both parties to keep earth free from the pollution. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall discuss both views with examples.
On the one hand, there are number of factors responsible to make land contaminate such as rapid industrialization, deforestation and unplanned urbanization. The government have a power to take decision and make strict rules behalf of the nation, and each civilization have to follow the defined regulation so the authority have a big platform to make change in the country. They should take necessary steps to save our climate. i.e., one project was launched in the 2010 by the Sweden government. It was known as “Let we take fresh air” in which they promoted public transports in free of cost for the children and women to reducing the use of private vehicles, and they also provided number of cycles to those citizens who had to go their workplace on daily basis. Presently, Sweden is one of the countries where people could breathe fresh air.
On the other hand, each person on the planet has accountable to secure the nature. Only ministry could not able to do anything without support of the society, so individually should be take first move towards to avoid damage of the habitat and plant the trees as much as possible to make our climate secure. For example, recently government of India awarded a lady who had planted and took care more than 40,000 trees for the last 40 years. Because of this huge contribution towards the environment, she become very famous in the world.
To conclude, global warming is the biggest issue of the world which could be solved through the contribution of each person and authority to the society, and it leads give guarantee to stay safe, secure and healthy to mankind and wildlife on this globe.
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each civilization have (has) to follow
each civilization have to follow the defined regulation (,) so the authority have a big platform to make change in the country.
on the planet has (is) accountable to secure the nature
Only ministry could not (be) able to do
so individually ( everyone) should be (“be” is not required) take first move towards to avoid damage
she become (has become) very famous in the world.
example in B.P 2 could be more elaborated, establishing the fact lady has inspired many and leads to cleanest city fact.
To conclude, global warming is the biggest issue (the issue raised in question is not just on global warming, but protection of environment which is a wider concept).
Feedback : Undoubtedly , there is great improvement from previous attempts. Be careful with the errors mentioned above.
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Some of the people have the notion that conserving nature is the duty of the government. Regardless of this notion, others have the contradictory perception that everyone should play an equal part in safeguarding habitat. I firmly believe that not only authorities should have the responsibilities in making amendments to preserve the ecosystem but also people are entitled to adhere to the rules and take part in creating awareness to secure environment.
Firstly, bureaucrats are primarily accountable for the preservation of biodiversity. They should enact strict laws and create regulations for sustainable ecosystems and to curb the destruction of nature. In addition to that, they should also insist on all industries to follow the norms defined by the government because our biodiversity is being largely affected by industries’ careless nature. For instance, Amazon forest is being deforested and lot of species are in endangered state due to the carefree attitude of government in safeguarding it by allowing the industries to cut down the trees. This in turn leads to soil erosion and it becomes the unsuitable habitat for the fauna to survive.
Nevertheless, people should have equal responsibility in supporting the administration by conforming to the rules defined. Moreover, individuals should engage in creating awareness against animal poaching and conservation of forests. The public can take initiatives in conducting campaigns about deforestation and preserving nature. For instance, in many parts of India, social activists have taken initiatives in supporting various government campaigns by involving in restoring the water resources and rejuvenation of polluted rivers like ganga. As a result, it brought back the various flora and fauna which relies on those resources for habitat.
In my opinion, both administration and people should play an equal role in the conservation of biodiversity. Even though the government enacts many laws to protect nature, if the public doesn’t comply with it, it leads to the destruction of our environment. However, Government also should take stringent action against violators to conserve biodiversity.
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preservation of biodiversity. (biodiversity may not be the appropriate word)
body paragraph 1 is stating ” what government should do”?, whereas question is something else.
like ganga (Ganga)
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<font face=”Calibri, serif”><font size=”2″>Some People argue that government is accountable for safeguarding our society, while other say every human being on this earth should contribute towards it. While regulatory body does play a vital role in formulation of laws to maintain our surrounding, however, I believe unless every human creature takes initiative, the entire motive will go in vain.</font></font>
<font face=”Calibri, serif”><font size=”2″>Regulatory authority is very much responsible to safeguard the society as they are the sole owner to create the laws that people have to follow. In fact, it makes sense for people to accept the campaings run by ruling parties such as “Swach Bharat udyan” to keep the society neat and tidy, heavy penalty for those spitting at public places, limiting the number of private vehical’s on road to avoid air pollution and take part in planting more trees to breathe fresh air and maintain the oxygen level.</font></font>
<font face=”Calibri, serif”><font size=”2″>On the other hand, every single human being is accountable to make the laws laid of government a success. If individuals do not follow the rules, the entire eco-system will fail. Particularly when it comes to taking care of their and everyone’s health, each one has to contribute to keep their surrounding’s clean, show their interest in maintainging greenery everywhere, maintaining proper balance so not to increase air pollution lead by maximum usuage of vehicals.</font></font>
<font face=”Calibri, serif”><font size=”2″>To summarize, although government is always on toes to protect the enviroment, however if the fellow citizen’s does not understand the importance and seriousness of issue to contirbute , the goal of preserving the environment will suffer.</font></font>
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safeguarding our society (some word related to environment will be more appropriate here)
laws to maintain our surrounding, however, (however is not necessary as “while” is serving the purpose)
Regulatory authority (repetitive usage)
private vehical’s (vehicles) on road
laws laid of (by) government a success
when it comes to taking care of their 9own) and everyone’s health,
their surrounding’s (surroundings) clean
f vehicals. (vehicles)
citizen’s (citizens)
does not (do not) understand the importance
Need to understand “apostrophe” usage, be careful with spellings
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accounataible (accountable)
regulatory bodies has (have)
necessary for (avoid) to plant trees
compulsory ( repetitive usage, use mandate)
then harmful gases (will not be) released in environment
individuals also plays (play)
one of my friend (One of my friends)
didn’t planted (plant)
Go through tenses and understand the rules. Sentence structure also needs to be improved.
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In this contemporary era, several individuals argue that country’s authorities have to take care of our environment while few people believe that it is everyone’s duty to safeguard our mother nature. In my opinion, I would agree with both the statements and will enlighten my opinion on both the parameters separately.
Firstly, global warming is an important topic of discussion in recent years across the world. And, this has led to an increase in water content around the globe eventually having many cities on the verge of getting submerged under the ocean. Hence, the government should take preventive measures to avoid carbon emissions into the atmosphere. For instance, in the city of Delhi situated in India, people are allowed to commute on their own vehicle only during alternate days for work to avoid air pollution. In addition, the administrative authorities can impose hefty fines along with stringent rules for dumping waste and hazardous substances into the sea which might cause danger to marine animals. Therefore, the central government should discuss with their state officials and work on a sophisticated system in preserving our natural habitat.
Secondly, individuals should take up some ownership in protecting their environment. For instance, certain people poach animals for their skin, hair etc in order to earn more money. In spite of setting up stringent laws by government officials, people still hunt endangered species for their own purposes. This can be prevented only by following it strictly as fellow citizens of the country. Furthermore, it affects our ecosystem which is dependent on each other. So, both the governing bodies and their nationals should work on a methodology which will safeguard their existing resources for their future generations.
In conclusion, while every species has its own role to play in the ecosystem, we have to work on ways of conservation mechanisms. Therefore, both the government and the individuals should collaborate together in preserving the ecosphere filled with natural resources.
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Topic sentence in first body paragraph could be more coherent to the topic, it should be bit specific.
Tone of first body paragraph is what government should do , rather keep these points but present them like reasons why people think it’s government duty.
So, both the governing bodies and their nationals should work on a methodology which will safeguard their existing resources for their future generations.
(So, not only governing bodies but their nationals should work collectively on a methodology which will safeguard their existing resources for their future generations.)
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Some people say that it is completely nation’s duty to keep the environment safe while others say every individual must take enough responsibility to save the environment. It is true govt. is a vital part to settle the environmental issues because one has to follow its rules and regulations. But every citizen is responsible to take actions to protect the environment as they are the first one getting affected from this issue.
Government is always responsible to maintain the ecosystem as it has the power to create laws and mostly don’t give a proper attention to this issue. A lot of trees are cutting down regularly for their own purpose and no one is giving any attention on this. If somehow govt. starts taking actions against this illegal occupation of destroying the nature, I believe people might start to save the nature.
Moreover, nature earth is the home of every living creature. Out of them human is the most developed species. But some of the people are destroying the nature for their own purpose and some of them has no idea what kind of damage they are doing to this beautiful earth. To solve this issue govt. has so spread awareness so that people can understand the necessity of the environment.
In conclusion, it can be said that ecosystem is a vital part of our living so to save this, entire mankind has to take responsibility, whether its govt or the citizens. Govt. has to make some laws to save the environment but ultimately it depends on the netizens whether they want to follow it or not.
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@fal mam please review-
repetitive usage of words ( environment
govt. (government) – avoid contractions and short forms
But (I believe) every citizen is responsible – Thesis statement needs to be more assertive
Lack of cohesive devices
some of them has (have) no
. To solve this issue govt. has so spread awareness (This sentence is body paragraph 2 is creating doubts on cohesion, may be it requires further explanation)
netizens (not an appropriate word as per the context) rather use residents, inhabitants
Need to work on vocabulary and sentence structure.
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Band: 2.5/6
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It was my mistake, I was about to write the govt. has to…
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It is often argued that the conservation of ecosystem is government’s authority while others disagree and think every Citizen must play a vital role in balancing the ecological phenomenon. Although we see positive steps are being adopted by common people globally, I believe that the policies of the governments will pave the way in handling the future environmental issues.
It is Government’s responsibility to enforce laws and if needed should pass amendment act in the parliament to conserve ecosystem. Nowadays, varieties of research and development programs and different initiatives such as creating the biodiversity, controlling air-pollution by formulating electric vehicles and usage of solar energy are adopted at mass level. While on one hand more and more steps are being adopted by local administration to safeguard the forest, rules and regulations are getting created for corporates to tackle carbon-footprints and achieving net-zero emission. The seriousness can be seen in the global arena as well where leaders from different countries are debating and putting their views to conserve the nature. According to the World Forest Conservation report, the Telegana state of India has successfully planted over 10,000 trees in their Haritha Haram program and targeting to create natural habitat.
Since India being a developing country, it is very important to address the issues such as finding sustainable source of energy, availability of drinking water and waste disposal. Indian Government is branding wind and solar energy as optional source of electricity for homely purpose, whereas scientists are working to transform the fossil fuel into organic coal, whose combustion capacity is much higher than the present form. Moreover, better infrastructure for agricultural universities and courses on the protection of endangered species are being taught at college level to spread the awareness of natural calamities among the students. Swach Bharat Abhiyan is one of the best initiatives taken by Government if not the best, as a result, the positive impact is writ large on the youth of the society.
In conclusion, people’s action such as planting trees and adopting cleaning habits is appreciable, the strict guidelines of Government to address the environmental complication will open new window for clean and better future.
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Feedback : Answer is developed partially as both the body paragraphs are mentioning about it’s government responsibility while the question demands “discuss both the views” , unfortunately, second view is missing.
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Protecting the environment is one of the key agendas on the administration’s list. This is the most spoken topic across the globe and actions are being proposed to decide the way forward. It is often argued that it is the government’s responsibility to take adequate measures in achieving a sustainable environment whereas others believe that every individual should take primary ownership to protect the society. In this essay, I will discuss both the views and try to arrive at a conclusion.
Increasing carbon footprint, high consumption of non-degradable items, reduction in plantations per hectare are few of the many challenges which are being witnessed today. Authorities can control many of these issues by implementing solutions. Firstly, they need to frame policies which can limit the CO2 emission from industrial areas and transportation industry. For example, promoting public transportation instead of private vehicles will help reduce fuel consumption, Maximum CO2 limit for large-scale factories and small-scale enterprises to minimize pollution. Secondly, introduce degradable alternatives like jute, cotton, etc. to materials like plastic which can easily combine with Mother Earth. This will not only reduce plastic consumption in humans and animals but also improve quality of sea water. Finally, new tax incentive schemes for organizations and people that will benefit them and encourage them to act as a responsible citizen. These guidelines are good but not enough.
These policies will have a positive effect on the nature only if these are being adopted at ground level. Locals to take equal ownership and responsibility to follow protocols which are aligned with the government. Various initiatives like compulsorily utilizing public transport for 5 days a week, utilizing the same cotton bag for multiple activities, reduction in wastage of basic resources like water, electricity, and planting trees every month can be an instrumental step in achieving carbon neutrality.
In conclusion, it can be said that although Institutions are the one’s who will prepare guidelines and provide a vision to the country, but it is the people who must execute them in conjunction with the governing body. I strongly re-iterate that a strong collaboration is required to ensure humanity achieves a healthy and safe environment for future generations.
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Firstly, they need (are /can) to frame policies- since we need to explain why people think it’s government duty
Institutions are the one’s (ones)
I would advise to develop second view equally as the first one, may an example will serve the purpose
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Band: 4.5/6
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enviornment (environment) – spelling errors
Let’s analyse – in formal style of writing, try to follow formal one.
cooprate (co-operate)
We (people) should use the amount of energy they use on daily
Every single (citizen) is responsible
on one hand(,) on the other hand (,) to sum up(,)- make use of punctuation
descharging (discharging)
ilegal (illegal)
takle (tackle)
calamites (calamities)
Feedback : word on spelling errors and sentence structure is very simple and basic , make use of varied range. point of view is also not clear, seems to be contradicting at few places.
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Band: 2.5/6
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Nowadays Environment pollution and climate change is a critical issue we are facing through out the globe. Many believe that government is chiefly responsible for conservation of environment while some people believe that its collective responsibility of every citizen to protect the nature and save earth. In my opinion , Both government and citizens are responsible to ensure proper environment conservation.
To start with, Since government has authority and legal system in place, the regulation and guidelines can be issued by ruling authorities and states in order to implement sound practices to monitor and regulate the pollution and degradation of the ecosystem. These guidelines can prove to be very effective if strictly made compulsory for general public and different industries. The Industries which are creating humongous amount of harmful pollutants in surroundings will be penalized heavily and will subject to imprisonment if noncompliance is beyond a certain degree .For instance, leather factory in Kanpur in India disposes large quantity of chemicals and poisonous effluents in to Yamuna river, which definitely harms aquatic life and drinking water for citizens. If the govt puts stringent regulation to this industry with a heavy penalty ,the industry will automatically be discouraged from such criminal offence of pollution spread.
On the other hand, each and every citizen is also of paramount importance when it comes to successful plan of environment protection. For instance every house hold generates a big amount of wastes from homes. if it is properly segregated before disposal ,it becomes easy for municipal organizations to efficiently process the waste and avoid situations like land filling or soil pollution. Additionally every person in society can start pollution control and environment friendly habits from home. To name a few, switching off lights when not in use, optimizing water usage, planting trees in surroundings are one of the examples that can be adopted by people in order to ensure saving the earth and protect the environment.
In conclusion, Government has legal authority to issue guidelines and implement system widely to encourage practices of environment protection ,whereas citizens have power to choose healthy habits to save the environment. Both government and people are responsible to ensure smooth implementation of environment protection
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It is believed by some people that only government should be responsible for the nature protections, while other says that every individual should be responsible for it, however in my opinion both the government and the individuals should share their responsibilities for the protection of the habitat, that will be more beneficial.
On the one hand, the government plays a vital role for controlling the air, water and noise pollutions to keep the environment healthy. The air and water pollution mainly comes from the industries and the factories, by which the local and the surrounding areas would be affected with troughing the waste water and the greenhouse gases in to the open atmosphere, which is subjected to create the serious health problems. For instance, several states (UP, Punjab, Haryana) in India have taken the step forwarded to combating on the deforestation and instead that they started implantation of the trees. Although governments should make the strict laws for them to safeguard the land and as well as the nature, furthermore the administration should make the policy and give the targets to local bodies for the controlling of the deforestation and implant the trees.
On the other hand, every citizen should be liable for the making the environment friendly, for taking the small steps towards it. Everyone should be aware that the air is being polluted by increasing the number of vehicles, which generates the green house gases in the atmosphere, Hence the people should maximize the use of the public transport to avoid their personal vehicles. For examples, the Delhi government has taken the strict action for the using of the personal cars, they make the law which is ODD EVEN system, which force to people to use the public transports such as metro and buses.
To conclude, that the government should take step to make the policy to combat the pollution free environment, however every individual should participate to help the administration for making the healthy surrounding. Therefore its combined efforts of the government and the public or every citizen to preserve their nature or mother land.
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