[Isha Singha]

Please read words written in Italics, these are corrections.

It is true that we are increasingly surrounded by advertising by companies that want to sell us their products. I agree that advertising has an impact on sales of consumer goods, which I will be discussing in this essay.

Advertisements can certainly tempt people to buy products that they might not otherwise want. A good example could be any food app. Even though we are not hungry, when we watch any advertisement mentioning some discounts or any new update about a new restaurant we immediately tend to visit that restaurant or order the food online. Perhaps, it is the influence of marketing that leads us to make these kinds of decisions. For example, we get festive offers or clearance sales ,which is again a marketing gimmick.

Second Body paragraph is difficult to understand in context of advertisements. It mentions about cross selling of related products but how its related to advertisements?

In conclusion, advertising can motivate people to go shopping ,sometimes we get benefited from it and sometimes we just fall for their marketing strategy but yes I agree that high sales of consumer’s product is because of attractive advertisements.

Feedback:

Well tried Silk! Look out for some silly mistakes in the form of Grammatical errors.

Body paragraph 2 is not in sync .

More use of synonyms and vocab could be there, for example for products ( which has been repeated), use can use goods ,consumer items, retail goods etc.

[Isha Singha]

Feedback:

Introduction:

Any product can be provoke instead write ‘can provoke ‘Any product can provoke customers to buy no matter if they need it or not it is with a use of advertisement.

You can start with this -Power of advertisement is the major reason behind people buying products irrespective of their need for it.

This essay completely agrees with the concept that good customers pass on their good feelings to others.- This sentence is not in sync with the actual essay topic.

In this introduction thesis part is not clear and the side that you are taking here.

Body Paragraph 1

-brand ‘named’ instead of brand name

-recently launched. It is – Full stop will complete it

Few Grammatical errors are here.

Body Paragraph 2

high charges… that product is worth’ buying’ rather than ‘selling’

Use ‘common people’ instead of the general people

Conclusion:

In conclusion, assert your stand one more time regarding the main question with overall conclusion.

In lexical resources words like popular commodities, consumers’ perspective,marketing gimmick , Incremental sales,endorsed etc could be used.

[Isha Singha]

I am writing this letter in context of moving to Cardiff.

Currently, I am working from Scotland but my hometown is in Cardiff, where my old parents are staying. As their health conditions are deteriorating day by day, I need to be with them for their care.

Moreover, commuting to Cardiff from Scotland every week is very time consuming, tiring and expensive. Furthermore, we have a branch in Cardiff which will be 20 minutes drive from my home.

Therefore, requesting you to move me from Scotland to Cardiff location effective from 1st Jan 2022.

Feedback:

Please check above given paragraphs for few grammatical errors. Word limit is less that 150,which can lower your score. Avoid silly grammatical mistakes.