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Sample Agreement:

In this world, many people are dying from various types of health related problems due to the lacking of appropriate health education and preventive actions. That is why a government should expend a huge amount of money from health budget for cure-related education as well as preventive measure. It is agreed that this policy has a great number of benefits and this will be proven by analyzing economical point of view of a country and the health aspects of people.

Firstly, many regimes spend an enormous amount of money in order to treat their people who are suffering from different types of serious diseases. This extravagance can be easily diminished when state commences of healthcare educational system by spending money to the health teaching system. As an example, if the administration perceives to their slums that smoking, drinking, and so on is bad things for human body through this educational program, many people will be not attacked by the severe sickness. This could save a large amount of money of the state. As can be clearly seen from this illustration that the idea may bring colossal economic benefit to the government.

Secondly, many governments fight against several types of diseases, especially diabetes and the heart diseases. Before these health problems assault the people, it can be ceased by taking some preventive measure. For example, exercise, sports, entertainment etc. can decrease the chances to become these patients. Making parks, playground, and cinema hall can influence people to do exercise, which can protect the people from these intense sicknesses. This can be achieved by investing the money in preventive measures from health budget.

In conclusions, this idea is indispensable not only to the people but also to the governments. However, the tremendous amenities of this policy fortify my argument. Therefore, a government should spend money for health education and preventive measure from health budget.

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Sample Disagreement:

A government has various responsibilities to its citizens, perhaps the most important would be the health care. There are different approaches to this, namely prevention versus cure. This essay will explain why treatment is superior, using the case of tobacco as a clear example.

Firstly, health education has its limits. Over the last twenty years, various western governments have attempted to discourage smokers by placing surgeon’s warnings and revolting pictures. Yet smokers still want to light up, therefore seriously questioning government endeavors of prevention rather than cure. Nevertheless, through the same period cancer treatment has improved considerably even producing beneficial spin-off discoveries for asthma suffers. Therefore treatment is not only more effective, it has also bettered other sectors of society.

Secondly, even if prevention has solid evidence of being effective there is the common case of patients suffering by pure chance. For example, it is known that people can suffer from lung cancer having never smoked anything whereas someone smoking twenty a day can escape such illness. Therefore, even having followed government guidance, there would still be a need for treatment. In addition, if funds had been diverted from research for cures to education there would be little to help ‘chance victims’.

To conclude, all though smoking has addictive elements, drawing from observations over various years it is clear that prevention has failed considerably. Furthermore, treatment can help those afflicted by pure chance, and even benefit patients with related challenges.

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(SAMPLE)

Dear Ben,

Thanks for your letter and the superb photos, It was great to hear all about your holiday and it sounds like you had a fantastic time in Rome.

I just thought I’d write to let you know that I finally quit my job and found a new one abroad. It will be much more exciting than my job with the local council ever was! I’m sure I told you that my manager left and since then it’s not been the same, we used to have a laugh at work, not anymore!

Anyway, I start teaching English as a foreign language in Italy in June, which will suit me down to the ground. You know I’ve always wanted to live in Italy, don’t you? It’s going to be a real challenge but very rewarding too. I’ll be teaching both adults and teenagers and I can’t wait to begin.

I’m sure you’ll be amazed when you read this but I have started learning to play the guitar too. You must remember how I hated music lessons at school, but this is so much fun

I hope you’ll be able to come and visit me sometime soon.

Keep in touch,

Steve

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(Sample)

These days many people choose to live or work in other countries, which has been made possible because of the convenience of air travel and modern communications. I believe that this has more benefits than drawbacks.

The disadvantage of this development is the distance that is put between family members. If a person moves away it is true that air travel and devices such as skype mean that communication and contact can be maintained. However, it is likely that a person will only be able to return one or two times a year during holidays, and speaking on skype or via email is not the same as face-to-face contact.

Despite this, there are significant advantages it can bring to people’s lives. Firstly, it means that people have the opportunity to see other parts of the world and the way people live. For example, people from the West often go to work in Asia or the Middle East and visa-versa. This enriches many people’s lives as they get to learn about other languages, traditions, cultures and different ways of working from their own country.

In addition to this, on a wider level it may also benefit other countries. If someone moves abroad for work, it is usually because their skill is required there. To illustrate, nurses and Doctors often move to work in hospitals in other countries when there is a shortage, so this is very valuable to the place they move to.

I would therefore argue that although there are disadvantages of the current trend to live and work abroad, they are outweighed by the advantages. It can enrich people’s lives and lives of the people in the countries that they move to.

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Feedback:

Introduction could be better, there is no thesis statement included in your introduction which is a major problem.

Quite a few grammatical errors noted, some are major.

Conclusion should be included in only one paragraph instead of two.

Sentence construction could be improved, sometimes it feels like there is no relation among different sentences, there are some dangling errors in terms of subject and object placement.

Band Score:4.0/6.0

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Feedback:

Do not write the causes and effects in the introduction itself it should only contain paraphrasing and a thesis statement.

Few grammatical errors noted nothing major

Good use of lexical resources, however cohesion could be improved.

Band Score: 4.5/6.0

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Excellent writing

Band Score: 3.0/3.0

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Some people argue that tourism has a negative effect on the environment while others believe that it is beneficial for the economy. In my opinion, I think that exploration is essential for the financial system for several reasons that will be explained in the following paragraphs.

To begin with, travelers from across the world spend their money in the hosting country, thus the income increase(s) significantly. For example, the visitors expend lots of their cash on different tourist attractions such as hotels, amusement parks and transportation. This results in aggrandizing the annual profit of that state. Furthermore, to accommodate for the high rate of exploration, the governments improve their infrastructure which not only attracts more people but also investing companies worldwide. To illustrate, more investors with well-known brands are captivated by the ease and stability of the province which rise(raises) the number of visitors dramatically.

On the other hand, tourism can have a negative influence on the local habitat of the nations. One clear example is cutting the trees to build new shopping malls and facilities to take in more travelers and stakeholders. Moreover, the massive increase in the number of people increases the level of waste produced dramatically and leads to environmental pollution. In other words, using more vehicles during transportation surged the rate of air pollution which affects the local plants and animals including birds in a hideous way.

In conclusion, tourism is essential for all countries especially for their providence, however, without being cautious, it can cause grave problems on the enduring.

Few grammatical errors

Band Score: 5.0/6.0

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I am interested in joining your institution to study English. Since your institution is one of the highly ranked colleges to teach English in my country to study abroad, I will be delighted to be accepted at your college.(Better sentence: your institution of the highly ranked colleges to teach English in my country, it got me interested in joining the institution for my English studies and I would be delighted to be accepted at your college)

Although your website has lots of information about the English course, I need some clarifications regarding the school itself. I will be grateful if you send me more details about the scholarships that are provided to international students and if there are any part-time jobs I can apply to before I start my classes.

Moreover, I am interested to find out if you provide private one-bedroom apartments or all shared accommodations with other students. I personally prefer to have my own bedroom so I can focus on my studies without being disturbed.

Also, it will be very convenient if the accommodation is near the campus, so I don’t have to waste time during transportation.

I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,

Eman Rashed

Good work.

Band Score: 2.0/3.0

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Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to you to ask for your help to provide a part-time job with the employers that have a vacancy that suits my qualifications.

My name is Eman Rashed and I have a master degree in Molecular biology since 2017 from Qatar university. I have over 10 years of experience working as a research specialist at Cornell university with focus in human genetics.

During my time of working as a research specialist I gained several skills. Among these skills, (are)the ability to conduct scientific experiments without supervision and troubleshoot any problem I faced. Also, I have excellent organizing skills and managerial expertise that helped me a lot to manage my own lab.

I would like to join a research lab that has potentials in producing good scientific papers which can support me during the next level of my career. A Scientist position would be the best fit for me but I am open for any similar positions that suits(suit) my qualifications and experience.

I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,

Eman Rashed

Feedback:

Excellent effort, nothing major to point out here.

There are two grammatical errors noted, other than that sentence construction and paragraph structuring both are fine. If you could use two or three good vocabulary words, it would be a perfect letter of course except the grammatical errors.

Band Score: 2.5/3.0

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Several countries are facing a huge increase in the level of crime especially among teenagers. In the following paragraphs I will discuss some of the reasons that led to such raise and propose few possible solutions for the same.

To begin with, the family breakdown and lack of support to their offsprings plays(play) a crucial role in elevating the crime rate in the community. For example, working parents spend most of their time outside their house which weaken their relationship with their kids by having(leaving) less time to guide them and provide help whenever they are in trouble. Another point is that the amount of violence in recent movies has increased significantly mostly(especially) in teenagers movies(movies made for teenagers). To elaborate, crime and action films expose the young individuals to extremely dangerous actions and ideas that without adults supervision can easily make them try to mimic them.

In order to reduce teenager’s high rate of crime, there are several suggestions. First of all, the families has to spend more time with their young kids and provide their support and give advice when they have doubts. For instance, when a youngster has a problem with one of his friends, his parents should instruct him how(to) deal with it without being aggressive. Moreover, The government should prepare more activities for teenagers that will keep the busy during their free time. An example for that is to engage them in the community services and give them some rewards when they do well.

In conclusion, the increase in the crime level happened due many reasons and there are many suggestions to solve such problem to have a productive individuals that are able to support their countries effectively.

Feedback:

There are a few grammatical errors noted.

Structure of the paragraphs and the content is satisfactory, however the complexity of the sentences could be better.

Vocabulary usage remains an issue. Try to include few good words.

Band Score: 4.5/6.0

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I am writing to you regarding my last stay in your hotel from July 10 till July 20, 2021.

Although the weather during this time of the year is usually cool in this country, the temperature was really unbearable. It raised up to 35 degrees which was totally unusual to all of the hotel residents.

As a result, the cooling system was not properly adjusted to compensate for the elevated temperature which lead (led) to a (un)discomfortable situation during my stay in the hotel. I was sweating all the time and my kids were crying most of the time due to the same reason.

I call(ed) the front desk complaining about this problem and they promised (That) they will take care of it. However, the problem was not solved until we left due to technical malfunction. From my side, I bought a portable fan and used it to cool the room temporarily.

I would like you to compensate for my last unpleasant visit to your hotel by providing a free of charge stay at your hotel and to compensate (reimburse) for the fan I purchased to solve (mitigate) the problem that I could not take it back with me home.

I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Feedback:

Some grammatical errors pointed out

Everything else looks good

Band Score: 2.0/3.0

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Thank you so much for letting me stay at your house during my conference in Australia last week. It was really very generous of you! We should start planning for our next vacation trip to France soon.

Unfortunately, I forgot very important documents in your room when I left the house. These documents were kept in an A4 size brown color envelope on the counter. I think it was next to the right side of the bed in the first drawer. It has my name and signature on the label stuck on the back of it.

I am sorry to disturb(bother you), but I really have to submit these documents to my line manager by the end of this week. (It would be a great help if you could send me the envelop though mail) So could you send me the envelope by mail? My mail address is 678 Anderson, south parkway, NY 2332.

I really appreciate your help with this urgent matter (and also looking forward to meeting you again soon.) great

Band Score: 2.0/3.0

[NIL Admin]

Excellent work

But need to include some good vocal in it.

One typo , instead of ‘money’, you wrote ‘many’

Band Score: 5.0/6.0

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Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to you regarding the laptop that I lost on my last holiday trip to France that was covered by the travel insurance I had for the same trip.

The laptop is a 13 inch MacBook pro silver color with red cover in a black backpack. It has 550 GB storage and 8 GB RAM and the charging cable was in the same bag. On the cover there is a picture of a gray horse sticked (STUCK)to it with some glittery stones.

I probably lost it in (at)the airport when I was checking my luggage near the gate number 6. I was helping my kids to carry their bags and put my backpack on the seat in the waiting area. We were late for our connecting flight, so I had to harry up and run to reach gate number 3A. When I got on the plane, I realized that I forgot my laptop and started looking for it.

I would be grateful if you can consider my request to reimburse the value of my lost laptop according to the travel insurance policy contract that I had with your company.

I look forward to hearing from you at your earliest convenience.

Yours faithfully,

Eman Rashed

Band Score: 2.5/3.0

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Advertising can drive people to purchase unnecessary items, however, it may introduce new products that can enhance our lifestyle. In my opinion, I believe that advertisements can improve our lives by presenting more options to us.

To begin with, nowadays, lots of cutting-edge technologies are promoted in the (Consumer Market) –industrial market for consumers–. For example, –the electrical cars marketing–(Marketing of electric vehicles) introduced the new era of waste-free transportation and gave us the chance to reduce air pollution. Moreover, advertising expands our list of options for some items and given(s) us the freedom to pick the ones that suits (suit) our requirements and budgets (budget). To elaborate, smart watches are now available in with multiple options that serves (serve) different purposes depending on our needs. While some smart watches are advertised to be better for fitness use, others are promoted to be user friendly for daily use.

On the contrary, advertisements can persuade consumers to buy things that they actually don’t need. For instance, TV ads on(for) new home appliances with huge discounts may encourage people to get them without considering the usefulness (utility) of these appliances. Another point, seasonal sales promotions in big stores drive their customers to buy more unnecessary items in bulk. For example, ads on clothes stores sales drive shoppers to buy lots of clothes that they may not like or use later just because their price dropped more than the original.

In conclusion, there are lots of advantages for advertising if people used it wisely, however, sometimes it can drive people to spend more money to get things that they don’t need if they were not aware about their actual needs.

Feedback:

Grammatical Errors (mostly subject verb agreement)

Excessive use of the word drive

Band Evaluation: 4.5/6.0

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improved the health..(safeguarded)

Ponder Over

It had been practiced by certain….

Occurring in the body

To touch our face with our palms…

Turn out….

Band Score: 4.5/6.0

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It would be easy for you to find

I’am sorry that I am bothering you with this.
I request you to send that envelop, because I need it by 20th November.
Please do it on priority basis.

Band Score: 2.0/3.0

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Rashmi, you have done a commendable job in this piece of writing.

Feedback:

These advantages are overshadowed by the negative effects it bring(s) along

The letter on the beaches has cost the state with loss of ecological balance and (subsequently) many species of some subaqueous animals are unfortunately, now extinct.

Unless concerted efforts are made by the persons (people: persons may be correct in philosophical writing, however in IELTS test, always use plural – people, when referring to more than 1 person) in power.

Band Score: 5.5/6.0

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Great job writing this letter, there are few things I would like to mention here as a feedback;

At the onset is not a correct phrase to use here instead use, “I would like to start with”

A new set of experience(s)

Besides that, I would like to have information about the mood of the classes, whether they will be conducted off-line or online.

Band score: 2.5/3.0

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Great going Femmy. Gods of IELTS are very happy with you 😁

The only thing to point out here is that, this seems a little short. Few more lines would have made this a perfect essay.

Band Score: 5.5/6.0

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You made a great stride in this task Rahul!! But we need to work with you to improve your score.

Band Score:3.5/6.0

Grammatical Errors:

In my opinion tourism benefit (benefits of tourism) are more than its (negative+) consequences

(comma is required here) the foremost development that Tourism bought (brought)

they will (no ‘will’) buy

due to which native people will (no ‘will’) get the job of tourist guide

unemployment as more the (no article) tourism will result in higher the(no article) opportunities

Moving to (negative) consequences which tourism has provided (inflicted)

at (around) the monuments or (on) roads

There are a lot more errors…….but these are not to be worried about, but taken as a constructive criticism. Talk to your trainer about your grammar skills.

Feedback:

• Try to improve your grammar skills.
• If you are not sure that the sentence is absolutely correct, DON’T make it. Errors will result in more negatives than the positives of complex sentence framing
• You tried to include some good words, but the usage was a little off.
• Repetition of the liking devices

[NIL Admin]

An excellent effort Jayanti. Kudos

Band Score: 5.5/6.0

Feedback:

Exceptional work in Grammatical Range, Accuracy and Lexical Resources. No error are to be noted here. Coherence can be a bit better. Few opportunities missed to join sentences together that would have fetched a score of perfect 6.0