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Introduction- inclining- inclined
BP2: are much- is much
with which- which
Conclusion- summarise all the main points
Band Score: 4/6 Keep Writing!
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Countryside?- remove question mark
BP2: in the city, they can- in the city can
require- be required
Conclusion- missing
Band Score: 3/6 Keep Writing!
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Introduction- add main points to support your thesis statement
BP 1: exposure in- exposure to
Conclusion- summarise your main points
Band Score: 4/6 Keep Writing!
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Opening Statement- discomfort in the street- add reason of discomfort
BP1: at 10 am to 12 pm- from 10 am to 12 pm
so that- owing to which
Follow format of letter. Write in paragraphs
Band Score: 1/3 Keep Writing!
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Introduction- an interest- interest
the benefit for the health- its us beneficial for health
Thesis statement should include main points
BP1: becomes- has become
Conclusion- the health- health
it is it can- it can
be staying- stay
Band Score: 3/6 Keep Writing!
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Introduction- have been reducing- has reduced
Paraphrase the question statement without adding extra information and write a clear thesis statement incorporating the main points
BP1 : does not- do not
people have- person has
goes- go
body fit moreover- body fit. Moreover,
benifit- benefits
BP 2: wake early- wake up early
didn’t- don’t
every people- each person
Conclusion- with, The- with, the
the walking- walking
Band Score: 2.5/6 Keep Writing!
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Introduction- benifits- benefits
remidial- remedial
BP1: in just- with just
the people- people
Conclusion- in the- for the
Band Score: 3.5/6 Keep Writing!
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Introduction- paraphrase clearly and write a clear thesis statement incorporating main points.
BP 1: peoples- people
BP2: vehicles who- vehicles which
Use passive voice, correct capital letter mistakes and incorporate complex sentence
Band Score: 3/6 Keep Writing!
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This letter’s tone is demanding not requesting
Conclusion- Looking positive- Looking forward to a positive reply
Add more details in Body Paragraphs
Band Score: 1.5/3 Keep Writing!
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Opening Statement: however- however,
It should clearly describe the objective of writing this letter without additional details
Cover three prompts in three different Body Paragraphs
Conclusion- pleasure of- pleasure while
Band Score: 2/3 Keep Writing!
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Introduction- are doing- should do
evolved- evolve
BP1: the exercise- exercise
BP2: sportsperson- sportspersons
Band Score: 3.5/6 Keep Writing!
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INTRODUCTION: children development- the development of children
result to- result of
indulging the- indulging in the
BP 1: to make involve- rephrase
WORK ON GRAMMAR
BAND SCORE: 3/6 Keep Writing!
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Work on grammar and punctuation-usage of comma
BAND SCORE: 3.5/6 Keep Writing!
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BP 1: sitted- sitting
BP 2: miss- informal
Band Score: 2.5/3 Use more formal language. Keep Writing!
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BP 1: way: ways
erratic- the erratic
large chunk- a large chunk
BP2: diversity, this – diversity. This
Conclusion- artistic- artists
Band Score: 4/6 Keep Writing!
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Introduction- the art- art
people perspective- people’s perspective
BP2: since ages- redundant
Conclusion- need- needs
Band Score: 4/6 content is good. Keep Writing!
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Introduction- are seen to enjoy- rephrase
BP 1: From the childhood- Since childhood
since and technology and business- science, technology and business
Band Score: 4.5/6 Keep Writing!
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Write a clear thesis statement incorporating the main points
BP1: individual- individual’s
BP 2: more focus- focus more
Conclusion- have more- having more
go- going
all- every
working- work
Band Score: 4/6 Keep Writing!
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Introduction- paraphrase the question without adding extra information
BP2: our free- their free
Band Score: 4/6 Keep Writing!
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Introduction: In my opinion, It- opinion, it
BP1: relaxed- leisure
BP2: becomes- become
Conclusion- carry- carries
enabling- enable
cannot denied- cannot be denied
Band Score: 3.5/6 Keep Writing!
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BP2: shift city- shift into a city
they’ve- contractions can’t be used in Essay because its formal writing
Conclusion- focusing on- a focus on
Band Score: 4.8/6 Good. Keep Writing!
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Thesis statement- First statement your opinion and then write bullet points on both viewpoints of discussion
BP 1: Like- informal
Write in passive and avoid we in BPs
Band Score: 3/6 Keep Writing!
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Introduction: resulted the English language as one of- rephrase more clearly
BP 1: empathize on- empathize with
Moreover, Single- Moreover, single
Bp 2: Drawback- drawback
Conclusion: a efficient- an efficient
Don’t write you or I in body paragraphs
Work on punctuation and grammatical mistakes
Band Score: 3/6 Keep Writing!
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Introduction: attracting- attracted
beneficial- be beneficial
BP1: attract to it- get attracted to it
gives- has
BP2: prone their body- makes their body prone
deceases- not required
BP 3: causes- is caused
doing- do
for becoming- of becoming
become a key- rephrase
Band Score: 2.5/6 Keep Writing!
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Shared Feedback
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BP1: seen more- seen that more people
BP2: had the person had eaten- If a person eats a
would be- redundant
Band Score: 4/6 Keep Writing!
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shared feedback
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Good
Band Score: 4.5/6 Keep Writing!
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BP1: the healthy- healthy
are variety of- are a variety of
foods- options
On one hand- On the one hand
Conclusion- summarise main points
Band Score: 3/6 Keep Writing!
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BP1: which is less- which is in less
Band Score: 2.5/3 Good. Keep Writing!
