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    Falak

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    August 5, 2022 at 10:47 AM in reply to: Task 2 ( discuss both the views) : economic progress

    Some people argue that majority of governments thinks that their Important role is to economic developments, while other say that all types of developments are equally important for a country.

    While development of the country governments should put their efforts to increase the industries setups, increase in the production of agriculture goods and to focus on the export and import of the goods, which will facilitate the economic growth. I believe that boosting the economy will impact on the human life style, human per capita income and country will stand in the good position in the world. For examples, the China has main role to boost their economy and they work hard to develop it and now the country has 20trillion$ economy.

    On the one hand, the financial condition of the country plays the vital role in the world level, this will distinct from the other country. There are various aspect to develop the country economy, Here, Government should focus on the increasing the agriculture production, Industrialization and the adapt the new technology which will boost the economy.

    On the other hand, all other aspects are also important such as social growth, human development, education system, the human mind will help the people to get innovative ideas, furthermore, good education system will enhance the practical & theoretical knowledge of the people, which will help to develop the country.

    In conclusion, although people are thought of the economic growth are more well focused rather than the those who are focusing on all the aspects for the country developments.

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    Falak

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    September 8, 2022 at 10:47 AM in reply to: Task 2 ( discuss both the views) : economic progress

    will pen down with (not required) my thought of uplifting both the economic and other related (crucial) aspects of each country.

    need to work on conditional structures

    band: 4/6

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    Falak

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    September 7, 2022 at 10:18 PM in reply to: Writing Task 2: Discuss both views (climate change)

    in the following paragraph(s)

    natural phenomena, which may bring (is responsible/ can cause) the Tsunami, Cyclone, draught

    cyclone or blood (flood) hits.

    company may become bankruptcy. (bankrupt)

    In addition to this (,) working professional

    Hence (,) this will directly Impact on (“on is not required) the business

    above will (have adverse/ detrimental) impact on the business

    the hospitals (need) to be setup.

    industries needs to be setup (Industrial growth will be witnessed)

    For instance (,)

    I would say climate change is badly (has negative impact on business) effect the business rather than the positive impact

    Band : 3/6

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    Falak

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    September 7, 2022 at 9:59 PM in reply to: Writing Task 2: Discuss both views (climate change)

    explosion (explanation) of my opinion

    is affecting to “to” is not required) agriculture

    cyclones (force people ) to change the habitat

    For instance(,)

    Mango session (season) start(s)

    have not get mangoes (?) – faulty sentence structure

    develope (develop)

    has (is) affecting

    in my consider (opinion)

    To conclusion (conclude)

    explanations are not effective especially in B.P 2 and there is strong need to work on basic sentence structure and tenses.

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    Falak

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    September 7, 2022 at 9:22 PM in reply to: Task2 (Essay writing) : Office design

    if everyone seat (sits) together

    seats (sits)

    is truly effecting (effective)

    example in B.P 1 talks about poor infrastructure in order to make it more coherent, quote the fact open space layouts

    certain words are quite repetitive ( seating , sitting)

    Band: 3.5/6

    keep writing!!!

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    Falak

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    September 7, 2022 at 9:10 PM in reply to: Task2 (Essay writing) : Office design

    in (on/at) our personal level – make right use of preposition

    in the workplace the (there are) changes

    portary (portray)

    not only merits , demerits but conclusion/opinion also

    there is no need to use “for instance” in introduction

    defoliated may be not right word to use

    when any person is newly appointed, they have (he has)

    try to avoid the usage of “we” ,”I” until and unless they are asking your opinion

    there is need of one concession statement in B.P 2 , to state your opinion

    I believe effective proof reading is required as at times sentences lack helping verbs or so.

    Keep writing !!

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    Falak

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    September 6, 2022 at 6:39 AM in reply to: Task 2 (Problem solution) : Brain drain

    from there (their) own

    the correct usage is “Not only…..but also”

    sunder pichai (Sunder Pichai)- proper noun

    to deal with this (,)

    appeating (appealing)

    one of the example(s)

    almost all the sentences in B.P 2, are monotonous in structure (must)

    Would like to see more dependent clauses / complex structures.

    Good effort with lexical resources.

    Band: 3.5/6

    Keep writing !!

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    Falak

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    September 6, 2022 at 6:26 AM in reply to: Task 2 (Problem solution) : Brain drain

    paragraphing should be done properly

    Introduction is not highlighting about solutions

    south asian (South Asian) countries and african (African) countries

    migrants are unwilingy to (willingly ) leave their motherland

    better salary especially in (“in” is redundant) doctors and teachers.

    economoy (economy)

    equipments who (which) are purchased by other

    to run his (their) family

    which is an identifiation (identification) for their.(?)

    First body paragraph talks about causes while the question is about “effects”, hence B.P 1 is off the track .

    Kindly be cautious with the points mentioned above.

    Band : 2.5/6

    Keep writing!!

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    Falak

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    September 5, 2022 at 11:59 PM in reply to: Task 2 (Problem solution) : Brain drain

    imgrate (immigrate)

    which were (are) developed countries

    their home countries faced (face)

    in their home countries (there is ) lot of competition

    careerier (Career)

    There is no need to explain reasons in introduction

    doctors and teachers have not got (don’t get) extra facility

    to (in) the United States of America

    To (In) conclusion

    Feedback : This essay is not answering the question (what problems this trend is causing) . There is need to work on all the four parameters. Basic sentence formation definitely needs to be consider.

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    Falak

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    September 4, 2022 at 6:48 PM in reply to: Writing Task 2: Discuss both views (climate change)

    This essay analyses both positive and negative impact Climate Change has on Businesses. (along with my opinion)

    unit located in (on) the Island

    there are great deal(s) of interest

    Thus, Climate change have (has) lead (led) to new business opportunities.

    In conclusion, I advise to state your opinion with better affirmation

    words like ( climate change, business are repetitive )

    Keep writing!!

    Band: 4/6

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    Falak

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    September 4, 2022 at 5:49 PM in reply to: Writing Task 2: Discuss both views (climate change)

    tackle the global warming, (this environmental shift)

    Although, it is an opinion of masses that climate has deteriorated businesses (when) there are others who believe that it

    This essay will illustrate the adverse effects and also positive outlook of environment shift. (along with my opinion)

    global warming (has) increased which

    I would suggest to come with one more reason for B.P 2, as we need to develop both arguments equally

    to draw conclusion instead of being repetitive with as a result , we can also use “Hence”, “thus”, “consequently”

    would like to see more variety of sentence structures (complex)

    Keep writing!!!

    \Band: 3.5/6

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    Falak

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    September 4, 2022 at 4:50 PM in reply to: Task 2 ( Two part question) : local food

    consumption (of) food

    portray the (my) opinion

    native land . (In addition to that,) Due to

    Due to transport facility that has developed by the technological advancements ( Due to the developed freezer transport facilities ….. ) try to make it less verbose

    I would like to see more variety (complex) in terms of sentences

    keep writing!!

    Band: 3/6

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    Falak

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    September 4, 2022 at 4:00 PM in reply to: Task 2 ( Two part question) : local food

    In introduction, your outline statement lacks highlights of 1st part of the question ( factors driving), same is the case with conclusion

    taco bell (Taco bell) ; proper noun

    every corners (every is followed by singular nouns)

    First body paragraph talks about advantages , but the words and language usage should be presented in a way where reader can understand these are the factors which are driving this trend. Maybe a more coherent topic sentence will be helpful

    Answer is somehow, partially developed. I would like to see more dependent clauses/complex structures.

    Band: 3/6

    Keep writing !!

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    Falak

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    September 2, 2022 at 12:45 AM in reply to: Task 2 (Problem solution) : Brain drain

    Kindly upload in pdf format with sequence of pages.

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    Falak

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    September 2, 2022 at 12:43 AM in reply to: Task 2 (Problem solution) : Brain drain

    major source of skilled professional’s (professionals and they are migrating ) migration to developed countries.

    with (the) least inhouse technological progress

    Good attempt with good usage of lexical resources

    Keep writing!!

    Band: 4.5/6

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    Falak

    Administrator
    September 2, 2022 at 12:20 AM in reply to: Task 2 (Problem solution) : Brain drain

    economically developing (developed) nations

    These (This) essay

    which is causing a delay in (the growth of these countries) order to progress these countries.

    but when is the time (the time comes) to give back

    repeated usage of words ( insecurity, skilled,

    (and thus, there will be no need )they no need to depend on other rich countries.

    employees (should also be revised) also should be revised to make it more employee (supportive working culture) friendly environment.- need to avoid repetitive usage of words.

    more and more migration of skilled manpower from developing countries to developed countries are (is) causing serious problems

    Feedback : Need to work on lexical resources

    Band: 3.5/6

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    Falak

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    September 2, 2022 at 12:02 AM in reply to: Task 2 (Problem solution) : Brain drain

    developed nation(s) rather then (than) their own developing


    evolved. (Period is not required as the sentence is in continuation and connected by which)Which ultimately hurt the growth

    nations to loss (lose)

    software developer(s)

    to coup up with (to cope with)

    then government start (started) a national reward

    effort(s)

    All in all, (To conclude,)

    developed nation is a (“a) is redundant here) bit tricky,

    professional moved (move/moving) to those countries

    Feedback: Certainly, there is an effort to make complex sentences, but I would like to see more variety of subordinating conjunction , not just “which” . Great range of Cohesive devices are there like In addition to, furthermore, adding to this … need not to be “moreover” all the time.

    Keep writing!!!


    Band: 4/6


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    Falak

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    August 30, 2022 at 11:28 PM in reply to: Task 2 (Opinion based) : Capital Punishment

    these kind of crime(s)

    make use of grammatical range especially the sentences.

    keep writing!!!

    Band : 4/6

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    Falak

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    August 30, 2022 at 11:24 PM in reply to: Task 2 (Opinion based) : Capital Punishment

    , criminal activities (have) become a major issue

    who has (have) been

    who came (come) across

    capital punishment should (will) increase crime rate

    in (to) higher level.

    to developed (develop)and build a strong country.

    govt. have (has) to also worked (work) on

    feedback : Use proper paragraphing (introduction , different body paragraphs), second reason has not been developed fully and is looking for further explanation. Make use of complex structures and even work on basic sentence formation

    Band: 2.5/3

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    Falak

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    August 30, 2022 at 11:04 PM in reply to: Task 2 (Opinion based) : Capital Punishment

    Paraphrasing could be more effective

    it is hard to distinguish “u” and “o”

    no one has the ( “the” is not required) forgotten

    this twenty one (years old)

    be pronounced ( this is not the right word to use here, may be to give the “verdict”

    “Handwriting” can become a trouble as the certain letters are not clear. I would suggest to consider computer based test. Sentence structure could be more effective.

    Band: 3/6

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    Falak

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    August 30, 2022 at 10:52 PM in reply to: Task 2 (Opinion based) : Capital Punishment

    as well as (has been used almost everywhere, there is wide range of connectors , you are advised to use those)

    but despite all that(,)

    himself of (for) his deeds.

    studies (study) of how the criminal mind works,

    Keep writing!!

    Band : 3.5/6

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    Falak

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    August 30, 2022 at 10:34 PM in reply to: Task 2 (Opinion based) : Capital Punishment

    To a great extent (,) I agree with the statemen

    sentence (sentenced) capital punishment to five gangster(s)

    who was (were) having murder, looting and rape charges,

    suddenly the crime rate drop (dropped) down

    it will definitely terrify to (“to” is not required) the offender before

    the robbery (was) avoided.

    the criminal saves (saved) him

    Feedback : Task achievement , coherence and cohesion is there though I believe response includes mainly compound sentences , try to add range in structures , and there is need to go through past tense. Certain words were repetitive (looting, brutal ) otherwise effort in lexical resources is appreciated.


    Keep writing !!


    Band: 4/6

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    Falak

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    August 17, 2022 at 6:34 PM in reply to: Task 2 (Is it a positive or negative development): Retirement

    despite of (despite)

    each individual (‘s)

    that ( those/such homes

    many (Many) old

    grandchildren’s mile stones

    use variety of sentence structure .

    Keep writing !!

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    Falak

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    August 16, 2022 at 12:57 PM in reply to: Task 1 (Letter writing) : Cookery school

    you are not writing to inform but to provide feedback

    who’s (whose)

    closing line is required.

    lexical resources could be more effective.

    Keep writing!!

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    Falak

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    August 16, 2022 at 12:27 PM in reply to: Task2 (Essay writing) : Office design

    Feedback : Great improvement in terms of sentence formation and cohesion.

    One thing which is quite noticeable is almost every other sentence is starting with ” when….” . In order to make complex structure there is great variety of subordinating structures , make use of them.

    Keep it up!!

    Band: 4/6

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    Falak

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    August 11, 2022 at 1:58 PM in reply to: Task 1 (letter writing) : website

    dispite (despite)

    that is (are) essential

    opportuinty (opportunity)

    Try to complete in 20 minutes .

    Band: 2.5/3

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    Falak

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    August 8, 2022 at 5:41 PM in reply to: Academic Task-1 ( pie chart)

    Chinese spent half of the budget on food (majority of their budget/ more than of their budget

    slightly by 58% (59%)

    word count should be at least 150 words

    sentence structure could be more effective.

    Keep writing !!

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    Falak

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    August 6, 2022 at 12:35 PM in reply to: Task1 (Bar graph)

    expanses (expenses)

    who spent more on hamburgers and Pizza.(Fish & chips)

    low income spent on (consumed) fish and chips (more) consumption more,

    , as (certainly/ clearly) the least spenders

    , followed by fish and chips and Pizza (pizza and fish n chips) respectively

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    Falak

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    August 6, 2022 at 12:26 PM in reply to: Task 1 (Line graph : Goods transported)

    density (amount) of commodities

    Overview, (Overall,) the highest amount

    the less (least) volume

    study (steady) growth

    unit is million tonnes

    whereas (,)

    stayed constant (plateaued) until 2002.

    large volume of the goods taken via (?)

    band : 1.5/3

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    Falak

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    August 2, 2022 at 12:33 AM in reply to: Task 2 ( discuss both the views) : economic progress

    however is not required in the first sentence as comma ((,) and where is serving the purpose

    imparative (imperative)

    for example (,)

    Although is contas

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