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delievered (delivered)
a (an) online
example is body paragraph 1 is not that relevant, it talks about amazon and supply chain , but you need to link foreign food as well
every nation has his (its)
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one of my friend (friends)
adults decides (decide)
conclusion is not effective as it is too generic in nature.
There is absolutely no need to quote example after each and every reason as it seems too mechanical.
Task achievement is there. Although there is great improvement, you can add more range of cohesive devices and sentence structures.
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other things become (have lower priority) the less priority to them
they have been blinded by (from) other repercussions this trend leads to.
it (will) bring forth different
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teached ( taught)
everyone have (has)
the response is not answering the 2nd and 3rd bullet points.
Try to avoid repetitive structures.
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curriculam. (curriculum)
However(,) the said course is not
Could you please include it and otherwise the course addition will fetch profits for you in long run as it is much in demand in market. (Could you please include it ; moreover, the course addition will fetch profits for you in long run as it is in great demand
d with the help of the recipe book and important notes that your school (had) provided, I had managed (“managed” use indefinite) to bake an “Avengers” theme cake for him.
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scaracity (scarcity)
make a law for the (“the” is redundant here) controlling the population
essay is about how to mitigate the impact of ageing population , somehow this essay got inclined to ” solutions to the effects of increasing population, I believe it could be bit more aligned to the topic.
lexical resources need to be considered.
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essay is not about “reasons” but “effects”
major problem(s)
as citizen(s) age
Secondly(,)
if people are able to retire,………,state pension will increase ( first conditional )
Need to work on grammatical range.
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have had been facing ( you are supposed to use “present perfect continuous” here)
provided that is not a right usage here
“while” is expressing the contrast , there is no need to use “however”
campaigns regarding (what ?) )
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“entities” may not be the right word to use, as it is used for things. Celebrated “personalities” will work
noticible (noticeable)
There should not be over use of connectors.
Few categories like Grande and Jenner were not discussed at all.
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should take for (to) mitigate the problem.
raised as a side effect of (this) growth.
For instance (like) , ageing inhabitants creating huge financial burden to the country.
Additionally (hence), they are not able to concentrate over work and explore their capabilities to do extra
work.
In addition to that(,) immigration process can be made easy
For example(,) many developed
issue in (to) some extend (extent)
Use cohesive devices carefully and be cautious with punctuation marks.
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repeated usage of words ( curiosity)
his increased trend towards the inclination of having different food varieties provide(s) lot of benefits
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Major reason behind this phenomenon is (foreign) food (foods/ food items) are not only easily available (in local market) but also provide healthier options to the public.
technology (technological) advancements
I was expecting bit more explanation or development of reasons in second body paragraph
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all the three (two) line graphs
after slight fluctuation (,) production of steel
demand (production) for steel has
noticible (noticeable)
august (August)
feburary (February)
to shows (show) a deterioration
repeated use of cohesive devices, or at times there is mechanical usage.
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What should the management do about it?
– Describe what you will do if the problem is not resolved
: Answers to last two bullet points have not been developed completely.
this is a partially developed answer.
Vocabulary has room for improvement.
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am writing this letter to inform (complain) about
What should the management do about it?
– Describe what you will do if the problem is not resolved
:-.Answers to the mentioned bullet points have not been developed fully, the answer is partially developed
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I Nitish, lives (live) near the restaurant
when anyone (someone) work(s) for 8-10 hours in office
f you did not act on my request, I would be forced to complain (this conditional sentence is not suitable as per the context)
Yours’s (Yours) Faithfully ,
there is certainly room for good and less common words.
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food has not shown a minimal decrease- as mentioned in overall
good comparison and grouping of data, keep writing!!
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pay out (payout is one word)
which was about twice (more than twice)
furthermore (,)
pence is not the appropriate word to use here because it is given in million pounds
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In addition to that (,) it affects
this noisy environment have (has ) been causing extremely (extreme) inconvenience to stay in our house.
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highly intensive music is (being) played at your outlet
if mentioned actions are taken by your management team for the peace of society. (If all the ambient noise level rules by state government are followed, it will be easier for us to maintain the peace..
l complaint against your restaurant and .(incomplete sentence) Hence, I request you to t
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repetitive usage of words (abroad, opportunity
tution (tuition)
Hence (,)
it became (becomes)
burdern (burden)
for instance (,) it have (has)
psycology (psychology)
divert (distraction) from their goals
advantages of study abroad is (are) job opportunities
Be careful with the errors mentioned above.
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As a consequence (,) this is not healthy for the
population of the earth is increasing exponentially and due to deforestation less land is available for the crop. There are lots of people who cannot afford food due (this all should be one sentence)
easy as food is getting sold in cheaper rate(s)/(they are able to get food for a lower prices) and many family(families) not sleeping without their meal.
Government (has) already declared that we need 70% -(example could be more coherent , may be an idea is missing to connect and maintain the logical flow)
here are demerits with genetically modified food which overweighs with the greatest problem in universe of feeding large number of masses with less rate (prices) and easy availability. (faulty structure, demerits are not overweighing as per the essay)
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educational institute(s)
under privileged (it is a one word) kids
everything is fine ..I just felt explanation could be bit more explanatory in order to maintain flawless flow especially in B.P 1.
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service should become (an) essential part of high school education
Involving (Involvement) in community service makes the students
moral standards and crimes (crime rate)
where the academy (educational institutions/ authorities) made
In addition to that (,) they were also involved
fostering this (these) good habits
repeated usage of words ( society, philanthropist etc. , try to use synonyms)
Lack of dependent clauses , hence complex structures.
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where (many people argue) genetically engineered foods (can) play a major role in combating this problem.
Thirdly, (secondly,) these modified foods
a standard lemon (plant) takes 5 years to grow full,
while a genetically modified lemon seed will take only four to seven months to grown. (a cohesive device is required since new benefit is given) Various of these foods are also know to be used in vaccines and in certain medicines.
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t Genetically Modified (foods) could be a reasonable solution,
finally to be accepted to (by) the society.
Moreover, our cultural values abide us with the (certain) type of food we consume on daily basis,
repetitive usage of words (tackle
Because it’s not feasible to grow the original cops due to weather and climate challenges, but (“but ” is redundant here) with few DNA changes these consumables could be compatible
conjunctions like furthermore, in addition to it can also be used instead of being repetitive with “moreover”
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but it is still (the) largest share of total spending.
which marginally increased to 11% (12%) in year 2011
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Introduction is missing
repetitive words (students, incidence, lot of…
students gets (get) a chance
childrens (children) going
which effects (affects)
there are incidence(s)
in canada (Canada) there was a (an) incidence
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Finally I will provide a logical solution (conclusion) to it.
culture & customs (don’t write any symbols)
repetitive usage of words like exposure, activities
Firstly, question doesn’t demand your opinion so that is redundant
if you want to suggest a solution , it can be mentioned in conclusion paragraph only. (In conclusion,….)
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