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    Falak

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    December 14, 2021 at 1:20 PM in reply to: Agree/Disagree (Reward or Punishment)

    It can be argued that children perform better at school ,when they are rewarded. (incomplete paraphrasing)

    Conclusion and introduction should be in a sync ( unfortunately , this essay is not following this idea)

    It would be advisable to write concrete topic sentences ( topic sentence of B.P 1 , could be more effective)

    Make use of cohesive devices

    segregate different ideas into distinct paragraphs.

    Band: 3/6

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    Falak

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    December 14, 2021 at 11:22 AM in reply to: Agree/Disagree (Reward or Punishment)

    students who were (are) appreciated

    it motivated (motivates) them

    moreover, teachers have the responsibility to explore the hidden talent of pupils ( found irrelevant or not have presently clearly in the context of topic sentence.

    The fear of getting punished would force them to be depressed and shy ( I believe the context is not accurate as per the argument)

    he feel (feels) more stressed.

    Not convinced with the conclusion (incomplete usage of “though”)

    Feedback : Use tense carefully . Subject-verb agreement is another factor that requires precision. Use essay structure as discussed in class.

    Band: 3/6

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    Falak

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    December 14, 2021 at 9:28 AM in reply to: Task 2 (discuss both views)- Newspaper

    Body paragraph seems to be distorted and example is not in adherence with content of the passage

    . The information gets updated in such medias (media) within a span of few seconds

    However, this is not possible with news papers. (newspaper is a one word)

    Conclusion could be more specific

    Band : 3/6

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    Falak

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    December 14, 2021 at 9:18 AM in reply to: Task 2 : (discuss both views- Art )

    Furthermore, not every kid would be talented on the same (academic) subject

    who are (were) at age of 10

    conclusion could be more effective , as it is projecting your opinion only . Keep question statement in mind and frame conclusion accordingly . (tip: Introduction and conclusion need to be in sync)

    Band : 4.5/6

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    Falak

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    December 12, 2021 at 5:19 PM in reply to: Task-1 (Letter writing) : Semi-formal letter to landlord

    I request you (to) please make an arrangement

    In suggestions, make use of modal verbs

    Keep writing!!

    band: 2.5/3

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    Falak

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    December 12, 2021 at 5:14 PM in reply to: Task-1 (Letter writing) : Semi-formal letter to landlord

    also need to fix a couple of bedroom windows. ( this too needs to be presented as affected by snowstorm)

    semi-formal letter should have

    salutation – Dear Mr./Ms….

    closing – Yours sincerely

    keep writing!!

    Band :2.5/3

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    Falak

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    December 12, 2021 at 5:09 PM in reply to: IELTS Academic Task -1 ( Batch B & Batch A)- Bar Chart – Seals Whales & Dolphins

    Then chart shows decreasing ( trend)in 2010 until 2014,

    mention units of measurement in introduction, grouping of data could be more effective

    Band: 2/3

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    Falak

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    December 12, 2021 at 2:41 PM in reply to: Academic Task-1 ( pie chart)

    from 1995 to 2011 (in 1995 and 2011)

    the chart(S) show that second large expense(s) were on clothing,

    , money spent by people on medicine jumped from 4% in 1995 to a minority (minor increment) in 2011

    Word limit needs to be maintained (minimum 150words)

    Band: 2/3

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    Falak

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    December 12, 2021 at 1:57 PM in reply to: Writing Task 2: Advantages and disadvantages

    between people among the society ( among people in the society)

    social media is decline ( has declined)

    utilize social media ( utilization of social media)

    Use word forms (verbs, noun, adjectives ) carefully.

    Lexical resources can be improved.

    Band: 3/6

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    Falak

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    December 12, 2021 at 9:42 AM in reply to: Task-1 (Letter writing) : Semi-formal letter to landlord

    Dear Sir/Madam, (Dear Mr./Ms…..)

    downpour that is (has been) happening since last Friday.

    I hope the issues are (will be) addressed quickly to avoid further damage.

    Yours Faithfully,(sincerely)

    Band: 2.5/3

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    Falak

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    December 12, 2021 at 9:38 AM in reply to: Task-1 (Letter writing) : Semi-formal letter to landlord

    Dear smith, (Smith,)

    I am john (John)

    honslow (Honslow)

    When i (I) reached in the loft i (I)saw that

    switch (ed) off the heating system power supply.

    if it rains again(, it will spoil it totally) that it can spoil it totally

    In addition to that (,) another window in the loft is also unable

    Proper nouns always start with capital letter

    Band: 2/3

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    Falak

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    December 11, 2021 at 11:25 AM in reply to: Essay advantages and disadvantages ( Uniform)

    easily recognizing (recognize)

    As a result(,)

    such as promote (promoting) the brand

    Feedback : Great improvement , make use of punctuation marks .Keep writing!!

    Band: 4/6

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    Falak

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    December 11, 2021 at 10:56 AM in reply to: Task 2 : GM foods (agree/disagree)

    initially apples can be found in the most northern part of the country but now they can be found in the northern (other ) parts as well, as they do not require any specific temperature or location to grew (grow) in.

    food producers can also charges (charge)

    it (is) found that usages of pesticides (has) reduced by 10 % as compared to the last ten years.

    Because of less pesticides (and high nutritional value), these crops may (improve the public health )lead to less health risks for people eating them

    Band: 4/6

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    Falak

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    December 10, 2021 at 3:21 PM in reply to: Task 2 : (discuss both views- Art )

    I am not convinced with paraphrasing , it could be more effective

    Example in body paragraph 1, needs to be more relevant and well-represented

    Some research shows that students can focus more in academic classes if they are happy and relaxed (which can be attained by introducing art subjects in their regular curriculum)

    syllabus are( is) required

    necessary (mandatory) art classes provide a

    to choose their subjects. (as per their level of interest)

    Band: 3.5/6

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    Falak

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    December 9, 2021 at 11:56 PM in reply to: Agree/Disagree (Reward or Punishment)

    as it motivates (them) to children.

    “I” always should be capitalized

    (being) rewarded is a greater (more helpful) than (getting) punished (

    it can leads a child (to lose confidence ) to lack of confidence.

    student who have (got) punished in school

    In smaller age (younger age)

    which cause (make) them

    Furthermore, adults can also encourage students how they can impress teacher – not very convinced with explanation and found it irrelevant

    need to work on conclusion as well , try to sum up things that have been discussed in paragraphs

    Sentence structure, word forms , lexical resources , cohesion all things require attention .

    Band : 2/6

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    Falak

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    December 9, 2021 at 11:41 PM in reply to: Agree/Disagree (Reward or Punishment)

    The topic sentences could be more effective and coherent.

    Keep writing!!

    Band : 3.5/6

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    Falak

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    December 9, 2021 at 11:30 PM in reply to: Agree/Disagree (Reward or Punishment)

    Sentence structure needs to be varied

    Use of transitional words will add more clarity and precision

    peruse (pursue) higher education

    student’s(students’) education,

    Keep writing!!

    Band: 3.5/6

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    Falak

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    December 7, 2021 at 11:36 AM in reply to: Essay advantages and disadvantages ( Children )

    Feedback : Verbosity has been observed, repetitive usage of words and sentence structure is also the concern.

    Lexical resources need to be improved, cohesion is another area which requires attention as discussed in class.

    I would suggest to make required changes as discussed.

    Band : 3/6

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    Falak

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    December 6, 2021 at 8:53 AM in reply to: Task1 (Letter writing) : Job for friend

    Try to be in word limit of 150-170 words as you will have only 20 minutes to manage this task .

    well-written , Keep writing!!

    Band: 2.5/3

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    Falak

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    December 6, 2021 at 8:50 AM in reply to: Task 2 : (discuss both views- Art )

    They argue that this will not prepare (them for their future) for them their future

    Conclusion could be more effective as it is not mention your own opinion (as asked in question) .

    Great improvement , try to use more cohesive devices other than that no complaints. Keep writing!!

    Band : 3.5/6

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    Falak

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    December 3, 2021 at 4:23 PM in reply to: ACADEMIC TASK 1: MAP

    Proof-read the piece of writing to avoid verbosity.

    Goodluck !!

    Band: 2.5/3

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    Falak

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    December 3, 2021 at 2:33 PM in reply to: Task1 (Letter writing) : Complaint to retailer

    . I would have expected (appreciated)/( I would not have been disappointed if the packaging had done effectively) that the package to be wrapped more effectively to

    I have already raised a complaint (refund request)

    Make use of punctuation marks.

    Keep writing!!

    Band: 2/3

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    Falak

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    December 2, 2021 at 11:38 AM in reply to: Task 2 : (discuss both views- Art )

    its (it’s) unwanted (futile) use of time

    art subjects don’t have future (future career prospects)

    One can’t survey (survive)

    Inclusive of (Including arts in school curriculum) arts sometimes made the children (pressurized and burdened) to be in a pressurize their schedule

    subjects for (to) acquire

    frequently (evidently) students’ performance may gets impacted

    In B.P 1; explanation of topic sentence is missing

    In B.P 2 : Topic sentence is missing

    work on sentence structure . Keep practicing!!

    Band : 2.5/6

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    Falak

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    December 1, 2021 at 11:16 PM in reply to: Task 2 (Problem/solution essay) : Traffic congestion

    towards there (their) duties.

    people park there (their) cars

    I would appreciate explanation with more supporting details

    However , on the other hand (either of the two will go as both project same meaning)

    moreover an (a) high amount of fine should

    No examples found

    Ever word after full stop needs to start with capital letter.

    Make use of punctuation marks.

    Follow essay structure as discussed in class.

    Band : 2.5/6

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    Falak

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    December 1, 2021 at 11:08 PM in reply to: Task 2 (Problem/solution essay) : Traffic congestion

    Feedback : Work on sentence structure, include variety of sentences. Follow essay structure as discussed in class (B.P : Topic sentence, explanation , example) . Focus should not be presenting more points rather effective presentation of one or two points. Use cohesive devices to develop smooth transition among sentences.

    Band: 2/6

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    Falak

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    December 1, 2021 at 4:33 PM in reply to: IELTS Academic Task -1 ( Batch B & Batch A)- Bar Chart – Seals Whales & Dolphins

    there were increase in numbers of all the three sea mammals over the period of 12 years even though (however,) the numbers of seals and whales only had a slight improvement.

    Secondly, no marked variation in numbers of whale seen since, initially they were only half the number of seals in 2006 (20 numbers),- not clear; Try not to loose the essence of sentence in order to add complexity

    Band : 2/3

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    Falak

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    December 1, 2021 at 3:54 PM in reply to: Letter Writing -4 (Forgotten Envelop )

    Feedback : Cohesion and Coherence is missing . Opening statement could be better so the ending , information you have given in the letter seems incomplete.

    Band : 1/3

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    Falak

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    December 1, 2021 at 2:45 PM in reply to: Task 2 : (discuss both views- Art )

    In B.P 1, second reason somehow merged into first reason or overlapping of language/ ideas has been observed

    hours to finish curriculum in (on) time

    No example found in B.P 2

    Conclusion could be more effective keeping essay type in consideration (both views and own opinion)

    Feedback : Take care of the points mentioned above and keep practicing!!

    Band : 4/6

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    Falak

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    December 1, 2021 at 10:59 AM in reply to: Task 1 (Line graph : Goods transported)

    The line graph demonstrate(s)

    Always mention units (metric tonnes) in introduction

    more than 70 million tonnes of goods are (were)

    40 million tonnes was (were) transported

    Be careful with word limit

    Feedback : Great improvement . Try to focus on subject-verb agreement .

    band : 2/3

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    Falak

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    November 29, 2021 at 4:41 PM in reply to: Task 1 : Manufacturing process

    Thereafter, those (these) need to be dampened with steam.

    . Last step is packing, when (where) the newly manufactured pellets

    Keep writing!!

    Band : 2.5/3

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